I had this idea for a main character for my web series. In the series, an advanced empire seeks to expand its colonial ambitions into another dimension. The people in this dimension were deemed as "primitive savages" due to their living in a medieval/tribal-like society.

Adam is the main character of this series, who is fighting the Empire and rising as a messiah to his people.

Here's his backstory:

Adam Telmegara was born to the Realmlin tribe deep in the Northeastern region of the continents, his father was Maxarius Telmegara, a retired half-zombie hitman, and his mother was a local Druid named Iris. Adam's mother died when he was six and his father passed away from Tuberculosis at 12, this left Adam orphaned at a young age, but thankfully his father taught Adam everything he knew before passing away. This allowed Adam to survive many years on his family's estate without the need for adult supervision, however, this did cause mental issues and social anxiety in Adam.

Most of the time Adam is either too quiet or too quirky, sometimes he struggles to speak full sentences cause he's still shy or anxious to keep talking.

Adam joined his tribe's army at 14 years old, but he didn't see much action until he was 16. An Empire from another dimension invaded his tribe and enslaved his people. Adam was able to escape, but from that day onwards, Adam made a promise, that he would kill them "down to the last one!"

When it came to developing Adam's arc I took loose inspiration from Eren Jaeger and Paul Atredies, as well as Moses from religious lore and historical figures like Hannibal Barca and Che Guevara.

Adam is vengeful and seeks his freedom, a life where he is no longer a target due to how he was born. Throughout Adam's younger years, he was often discriminated against due to his undead heritage and also due to being from the Northeastern Region, and now an empire from another dimension wants to make him and everyone else a slave.

During his time in the war, Adam is brutal yet effective just like Hannibal. His Crusade in the West was considered the highlight of all the atrocities, he burnt down colonies, destroyed armies in mass, slaughtered thousands, and forced POWs to labor to provide for the liberated slaves (he gave them compensation later).

At some point, Adam realizes the Empire won't stop, so he goes on a massive quest to find a power to defeat them and save his people. As he travels, he sees forms of injustice, chaos, and the fall of civilizations. This leads him to find a precursor-like being that says they will give him special powers but warns Adam of the future.

The Precursor gives Adam a vision of the future, showing that he will become "Somethings the Gods would quiver at" and leave "A storm of blood that stains the whole of the multiverse" but Adam chooses to take these powers seeing the future as a price he must pay for freedom and revenge.

As you can see, he's fairly similar to Paul and Eren, but unlike Paul and Eren, Adam defies fate and backs out on his plan to destroy the Empire's homeworld, instead fighting to free his people and bring an end to a tyrannical government.

A big part of Adam's story is how leaders, specifically the crazy and heavily idolized ones, are still human beings with flaws like everyone else, and it also focuses on the theme of what if the oppressed had the power to end their oppression and more.

So, I have an issue that I feel like I need NON-WHITE opinions on LOL. I myself am white, but I'm writing a ton of POC characters. I'm creating a toy kingdom with 10 princes + princesses in total of various races. They are like Barbies in charge of the kingdom!! I have most of their personalities and jobs down {they're supposed to be the best at their jobs around the globe}, but some of them I'm just so confused on what to do.

I'm stuck on the Indian princess named Piya. I feel like every job + personality I give her could be stereotypical :/ I want to make her a legit genius at science and {natural?} medicine, like she is revered by even the best professors, but I just don't know. Her brother {Indian prince} studies animals and lives in an animal sanctuary. His personality is also open. I don't know what personality to give her... Her Barbie image color is green! I was going to make her a professional dancer, which would allow her costuming to be more colorful and fun!

I'm also stuck on Sofía, the Hispanic princess. I've made her a professional gymnast, but she's also epic at swimming etc. I originally gave her a super fun personality, but I decided to make her half shy half confident: confident around friends, shy around family! She also has an arc about wanting to be both feminine and more masc. Just wanna make sure it isn't weird if I make her an athlete? 😭

Teddy, the African prince, has had so many changes LOL. Originally, I was going to make him different from all the others, making him less focused on being famous, and more focused on being a businessman and growing a family in private. But, IDK, I'm thinking of making him a rocketeer/astrophysicist! His personality is still open. I made him super chill but also fun and can have fantastic conversations. I just hope he's not "boring" compared to some of the crazier ones because he's more collected.

I'd LOVE some help with deciding jobs and personalities, please!!! I already have the others done, and I'm pretty confident with them, I'm just stuck 😭

So there Vladislav's friends were, waiting for them on the pier in Solnichniy. They were a motley bunch in Elena's opionion. One was both broad and wide, another frail in comparison and a third so pale it gave Elena a run for her money. Two other seemed roughly equal in height and width to Vladislav though one; hiding what seemed to a bald head under his cap, had rather sunken cheeks, fit for a drug addict.

Elena glanced at Vladislav who stared uncaring out the windshield for a moment before he parked the car, got out and went to the trunk. she had searing questions on her mind, yet they did not manifest themselves on her lips as she had hoped. Instead she unbuckled her seatbelt and got out of the passenger seat, eager to see what Vladislav was shuffling through his trunk for. The harsh breeze blowing from the Green Sea cut through her coat, making her teeth chatter as the chill air seeped into her skin and made a mess of her long hair.

She glanced at Vladislav's group of friends again, all wearing working and hunting clothes, camouflage or dirty aviator jackets. A bunch of blue-collar kids, that much was true. Elena moved to be behind Vladislav, watching him grap what seemed like a metal pipe from the large canvas bag, she had noted he kept in his trunk. With a shake of his hand, the sack came loose around the object, revealing an assault rifle.

Elena nearly jumped but caught herself, taking a step back. She turned her gaze to the others who too were going through the trunks of the Golf and Lada it seemed they had arrived in, brandishing weapons of their own. Most of them seemed to be from the time of the Great Patriotic War though Elena was no expert in guns.

"V-Vlad...w-what's all of this for?" She stammered, taking another step backwards. Vladislav looked at her relaxed while he loaded the weapon. "Some of the Russian guys up in Olsha are getting a little too big for their britches" Vladislav said and hummed, pulling back on a lever on the right side of the assault rifle

"Are you going to kill them?" Elena cried, both of her hands reaching up to cover her mouth. Vladislav turned, tugging down his beanie indifferently. "Elena...no. Of course we aren't going to kill anyone. We're just going to go up there and have a chat about...catcalling the girls from the other side. We don't take kindly to that, you see"

Elena's throat bobbed as he said that. Last time she had heard the word 'catcalling', it'd come out of Vladislav's mouth too, at the party. When he was beating up a guy for catcalling and getting touchy with Elena. That guy, whose nose Vladislav had broken, had one week later thrust a screwdriver into Vladislav's side and narrowly missed his liver.

SCENE TWO

Vladislav was already waiting for her as she stepped off the morning bus. His white Lada sat in the middle of the school parking lot as it did every morning when he had driven from his home oblast. After feeding and milking sixty-five cows. The windows were foggy to put it the very least. Elena’s brow furrowed as she stepped closer to the fogged windows. She attempted to see through the obstructed glass in the driver’s side but couldn’t see nothing. Oh, then she might as well pull the door handle.

She gripped the door handle, pulling with all her might. Just like so many other Ladas she had seen, his had begun rusting away at the edges of the roof, doors and trunk. A bit of algae had begun growing on the rubber moulding holding the windshield in place.

The door croaked open, revealing a snoring Vladislav laying on his side. He was wrapped in the rough gray woolen blanket she had seen before, but this time wearing a new jacket. If one could call it that. It was in fact a military uniform with a thick fur collar, like the ones she remembered the soldiers wearing when her parents watched the news about the war in Afghanistan against the Mudjahadin years ago. He had probably gotten it from a soldier in need of money or from a surplus store, likely without paying.

His jeans were a different story all together. Though not visibly worn at first, one could clearly the patches his mother had sewn on the inside to hide the fact it wasn’t denim fabric. The interior of his car was an equal mess. On the dash sat a half eaten piece of Buterbrod with pickles and a big slice of kolbasa. The cassette player also sat on the dash, scewed directly into it with a uncovered piece of wire running down into the radio. Beside Vladislav lay his tumbler, beads of condensation water running down the metal.

On the passenger seat sat a bottle of vodka although to Elena’s satisfaction he had only taken a small amount to spike his tea. Though she had a feeling his trunk was filled to the brim with old plastic containers filled with to the brim with homemade vodka. He'd sell it out of his trunk after school, she had figured out that much.

His book bag lay on the backseat together with three or more tractor manuals, and a mix of nails, bolts and nuts. Despite the half dozen air fresheners that hung from the windshield mirror, the car stank heavily of livestock. Drool dripped from the corner of Vladislav's mouth, pooling in one of the backseat seat wells. Elena scoffed, he shouldn't be expecting a good morning kiss from her.

The three weeks she had been dating this to put it frankly, peculiar dirt poor son of an electrician and a nurse, had been quite a ride. Well, that waswhen she compared it to her somewhat comfortable life in Miroslavl now and the bit of money her parents had scraped together with their former positions as low level officials of the bygone Communist Party; back when the Soviet Union had yet to collapse and Chernarus was yet to become an indepedent country. While they lived in Novigrad. Well, they had lived there until seven weeks ago.

So my character is sort of like if discord and bill cipher were the main protagonist. So my character can jump dimensions whenever he wants. And is sort of suffering from a Truman show thing, where he feels like he's a character in a show. In which he had no part in, and all the tragic events that he experienced were possibly 2 second gags or jokes.

So then at no particular point in the story, he travels to a dimension that just so happens to be an established property (either from his world or someone else's). like its a shittily written show that nobody likes. And the characters say very painfully stupid things.

And this point my character has lost all sense of restraint. And decides to look up on the multi-net, and starts listing off all the bad things that happened in his world. Like how the show was created lazily, the staff were over worked and one of the writers was a pedo or something.

So essentially my character ruins these new characters whole perception of reality. Into thinking they're just products of laziness. Basically like saying santa isn't real to your 5 year old, but on a universal scale.

Now I'm not going to make him completely heartless because of this comment. But I want to try telling a moral about not ruining other peoples life because yours sucks. they'll very learn their lesson and actually never do something like that again.

But at this point, I want to know if they're any bit redeemable after this in any way? Or has the bridge collapsed at this point?

Rrazeb ,,Rabbit" Bizzar, an 26 years old dude who apears as a odd one from the momemt he had moved to his apartment in city.

From the overly dark, edgy atire of occult themed clothing and jewery, to the whole vibe he gives off, he means trouble. At least that is what he is trying to make people thing.

The true is, when one's eye gets catched by the chunky rink with inverted pentagram, the oversize band t-shirt of some try-hard metalic band or by his rambling about horned god, the rest of his existence is suddenly forgotten.

It overshadows his buck teeth, overbite and weak chin. Maybe you would'nt notice how tired he actually looks, how sunken his eyes are, or the fact he is anxiously playing with hem of his shirt.

Rrazeb is using ,,scary edgy occultist" persona as a shield. As an escape from the true even he wants to ignore.

It pretty much started in his childhood. He was born to heavily religious family. They were wealthy, living in big farm in the middle of nowhere. Rrazeb had to be the perfect kid. Great school marks, playing violin, helping on the farm...you name it. He was quiet, lanky teen, never able to revolt, since there were punishments Parents belived that higher powers are the only true, hence they refused modern medicine. This was the last the nail in the coffin.

It was a rainy day, Rrazeb, 17 at the time, was yet again running away from their dig Rufus, a hellhound that was constantly agresive thanks to his fathers not so nice way of carring for him.

He didn't managed to outrun him and ended with nasty bite on his ankle.

They didn't get him the shot. And as everyone, Rrazeb known well about the whole thing around rabbies.

The chance is always here.

Poor Rrazeb was anxiously fearing the worse for months before he turned 18, could legaly decide for himself and ran away from them. But these months made him hate his parents, the word even more. He was alone, uterly scared

Years pass by, he is ironically embalmer now, working his ass of daily. He is basically revolting against everything his parents velived in. Under the ovey edgy persona, theres tired, not so happy dude who just wants someone to be with, something to eat and fall asleep while watching trashy horror movie. He is a part of wrath-themer cult, but is all talk-no action.

His apartment is a mess, and he too. Luckily, with help of his friends- schizofrenuc Oswald and ex-drug junkie Medard, he no longer feels alone and even drops the persona round them.

The true Rrazeb is slowly showing and getting help.

Like for example "[Name] is culturally Asian but ethnically Canadian? That sounds wrong in my head and ethnicity vs culture is beating my ass. Can anybody help

A is on a climbing trip. She loves climbing. She’s really excited. They are in the wilderness, no cell service, a day’s hike back out, and this is the last long weekend before school starts again, so she can’t go back to climbing after this.

B insisted on bringing his dog even though A didn’t want the dog there. On night 1, the dog runs away.

B wants to spend the trip searching for the dog. A points out they’ll just get lost in the woods and if anything, the dog will know to return to their campsite. A wants to keep climbing, but she needs B to belay her so they can’t split up.

Whose side would you be on as a reader? Is a missing dog too much of a trigger point for most readers to understand A’s point of view?

I have a character, Elena, who has just moved to another part of her country with her parents. In her high school she befriends a boy, Vladislav, from the neighboring oblast ( region )

Elena discovers that Vladislav sells samogon ( homemade vodka ) and he is quite open to her about this. She tells him that what he does is illegal and Vladislav counters that so is corruption but everyone still does it. Besides his illicit activities and his blatant nationalism, he is mostly polite, friendly and honest and Elena has begun to fall a little in love with him.

Hi so I'm not a writer, but my dream is to be an artist and I am particularly interested in animation. I want to make an animated version of the Jekyll and Hyde musical (The musical gothic thriller, with Anthony warlow, and am taking inspiration from the performance by Capital City productions ).

Basically what I'm asking is a way to create the characters and to develop them into believable people. Any advice?

I get that this might be the wrong Subreddit but I couldn't find anything else but if there is somewhere else to post this please let me know.

Byee!!

I’m currently in the midst of brainstorming and Developing a Technology based villain but I hit a roadblock. I’m not what type of villain they should be. When I first was brainstorming the idea of them I originally imagined them to be a sort of villainous tech o but I started to second guess myself since I was wondering if that would be cliche. Design wise the character would have TV/Computer monitor for head.

If need anymore context or information on the character feel free to ask.

So I'm writing up a character bible for a potential show I want to pitch. And one of the "episodes" I'm having a hard time conceptualising. In short this show is about a group of dimension hoppers, travelling the multiverse for unsolicited personal reasons. And each have to deal their disabilities and mental problems.

One of the characters in the group is called "Mimy" and she's an alien that wears a full body suit that covers up every bit of her body, making her look like a white mannequin doll. Her gimmick is that her suit allows her to holographically change her appearance to someone or something else (think T.U.F.F Puppy's Chameleon)

What sets her apart is that no one knows who or what she is under the suit. Her age, gender, species is a complete mystery to everyone (also I'm just giving Mimy she/her pronouns for now). I feel she has a nice dynamic with the rest of the cast.

I just don't know how to write her debut. Now I don't want to reveal too much about the show (mainly because if I play my cards right I could get some wicked reactions) So I'm keeping most things secret for now.

But I just can't think of a good way to add her to the cast that feels genuine. Plot, scenario or location don't matter too heavily as its a multiverse show. I just want the "episodes" setting to be a metaphor on why she's joining the gang or wanting to leaver her old life behind.

Hello! I'm not very visually creative so I'm looking for advice on making up how a character should look?

I've been creating these characters lately for my story / world building project / future series. I aiming a comedy and adventure themed series where the characters are put in various adventures. But first, what do you think of my characters?

Princess Rayna: Princess Rayna is the princess of the Evaria empire, consisting of the eastern U.K like kingdom Excaleon, and Spain like Kingdom Amareino. Rayna's element is Mana, forging magic from the mind and emotion. Rayna is a kind and energetic young woman, and wants to be a warrior just like her mother and father, however her father doesn't allow it because he believes she is too young (despite being 20) and it's too dangerous for her. Rayna wants to be a warrior because most of the kingdom doesn’t respect and finds her too “giddy”. After meeting Tye (more on him later) Rayna wants Tye to be her mentor and teach her how to be a skilled warrior.

Tye: Tye is a former Andreyas soldier turned Evarian knight. Andreyas is Evaria's rival kingdom and is based on Canada and USA. Tye's element is Water, the ability to cast water / liquid based spells. Tye was once an Andreyas soldier, but was left behind after failing to retrieve something from Evaria. After Rayna convinces her father to keep him, and being impressed by Tye's ability in Combat, Rayna makes Tye train her to become a warrior. Stuck with no other choice, Tye agrees and they go on many adventures because of course they do.

Cynder: Cynder is a servant in the Evaria Empire. I’m deciding whether her element should be Dark, the ability to cast darkness and corruption spells or Metal, the ability to cast metal based spells. Cynder is Rayna’s best friend, but unlike Rayna she is “Tougher than a dragon”. Despite this, Cynder is always there for her friend, and is willing to help her whenever she can. However, like Rayna, she also wants to get respect from the kingdom, and is willing to do anything to do that, even if it means betraying her best friend.

Darkstalker (Prince Damien): Darkstalker (real name Damien) is the prince of Andreyas. His element is Dark, the ability to cast darkness and corruption spells. Darkstalker is essentially a warrior who fights with honor and is willing to do anything for his father. He is a highly skilled warrior (his skills are similar to batman's) and has defeated Tye, Rayna, and their friends time and time again. However, after meeting Evelyn (more on her later), Evelyn changes his mind and this allows Darkstalker to finally stand up to his father.

Evelynn: Evelynn is a medic of Andreyas. Her element is Ice, the ability to cast ice and snow based spells. Evelynn is a kind hearted young woman, but is always bullied by her rival Camellia. She always counts her blessings and is glad to have her father (the captain of the Andreyas soldiers) and her mother, and her dog, Blizzard. When Evelyn meets Darkstalker, Darkstalker spends more time with her, and Evelynn shows Darstalker the beauty of life and happiness, which ultimately leads to his redemption. Despite her kindness, she is a skilled fighter (being the daughter of the captain) and always joins Darstalker on his adventures to protect and serve his kingdom.

Nightmare (Emperor Igneal): Nightmare is the emperor of Andreyas. His element is Fire, the ability to cast fire and heat based spells. Nightmare wants nothing more than to make his Kingdom highly powerful, even if it means allying with the avatar of the God of chaos and Destruction, Zestroyon. Nightmare is also a powerhouse, capable of defeating most of the cast if he wanted to. His cursed state allows him to absorb any forms of heat and he is capable of things no human or mortal can do. Nightmare also feeds on the blood of live animals to control his curse from corrupting him. Let’s just say he got his curse after a certain incident.

Empress Arianna: Arianna is the queen of the Evaria empire and Queen of Rainara kingdom. Her element is Mana, forging magic from the mind and emotion. Arianna really cares for Rayna, her daughter, Arianna wishes that Rayna could become a warrior. She doesn’t like how the people think of her daughter as naive, and wishes her father, Leynad would take her more seriously.

Emperor Leynad: Leynad is the Emperor of the Evaria empire and King of Excallius. His element is Light, the ability to cast light based spells. Leynad is a man with a mysterious past. He wants to keep his daughter safe since crimes and attacks have been rising in Evaria recently. He also keeps a lot of secrets from Rayna, including the fact that he is hiding many demonic artifacts from her daughter and the true nature of his past.

Lord Vieran: Lord Vieran is one of the few lords of Evaria. His element is Metal, the ability to cast metal based spells. Lord Vieran is a dangerous man. He is the leader of the Zeorex terrorist group and the one behind the attacks in Evaria. Vieran wants to summon Zestoyon and wishes for one thing, to have a universe that goes by his laws.

Axol: Axol is an angelic axolotl. He first met Tye and Rayna while trying to defeat and capture a powerful demon. After completing his mission, he later allies with them to help fix the many time anomalies in their world and helps them defeat the demons that threaten their kingdom.

Zestroyon: Zestroyon is the god of Destruction and Chaos in my universe. He lives for the many chaotic and destructive things that happen on Earth and other mortal planets. Zestroyon is currently manipulating Nightmare and Lord Vieran to free him from his prison. However, despite his love for chaos and destruction, Zestroyon is a rather immature and odd individual, fooling around with his stern and serious victims.

So for context. This specific character of mine goes by the name “Tank”. She’s a character in my video game who tackles a lot of themes regarding gender.

Have you ever seen that cliché where the male version of a character is all badass, but the female equivalent is made to be either sexy or adorable? Completely disregarding any interesting concepts or ideas that could be implemented with a female character? “Tank” is that to a hyperbolic example to start a conversation on female designs in fiction.

Her design is so plain and objectified intentionally to make the player / audience feel almost upset at the wasted potential her design could’ve had especially when compared to the other males and females in the game and point a spotlight on how intrinsic “selling sex” is in our society.

I think she hands down, has the greatest story out of all the characters within my game by a wide margin directly responsible to those decisions I made with her design, but a lot of that revolves around the fact that she’s incredibly boring.

When I’m crafting her kit in game, I was stuck thinking

“How can I make her interesting?”

But when I made her interesting (in game), it shallowed the story and the whole point of why it’s an issue. But when I made her boring (in game), it would obviously lead to a very underwhelming experience and I don’t want to sacrifice the player’s enjoyment to further get my point across.

I hope I was able to get my point across.

Her being boring (personality wise) helps her story become one of the greatest, most interesting, timeless stories I ever wrote and makes her unironically interesting.

Her being boring (gameplay wise) means who would pick her over the unique, engaging characters instead?

Her being interesting (gameplay wise) directly ruins messages within the story, examples being: bias towards gender roles / stereotypes affecting women much more harshly, commodification of sex, etc etc etc. and muddying the other concepts I tackle indirectly.

Is there a solution to this? Is the concept broken by inception? Thoughts? Ideas?

I'm embarking on my first novel-writing journey and aiming to feature four protagonists in my story. However, I'm seeking advice on how to effectively develop and manage multiple main characters. How can I ensure each protagonist feels distinct and compelling, with their own unique voice and arc? Additionally, how do I weave their individual storylines together seamlessly while preventing one character from overshadowing the others? Any tips on maintaining balance and cohesion in a narrative with multiple protagonists would be greatly appreciated. Thank you!

Vladislav was already waiting for her as she stepped off the morning bus. His white Lada sat in the middle of the school parking lot as it did every morning when he had driven from his home oblast. After feeding and milking sixty cows. The windows were foggy to put it the very least. Elena’s brow furrowed as she stepped closer to the fogged windows.

She attempted to see through the obstructed glass in the driver’s side but couldn’t see nothing. Oh, then she might as well pull the door handle. She gripped the door handle, pulling with all her might. Just like so many other Ladas she had seen, his had begun rusting away at the edges of the roof, doors and trunk. A bit of algae had begun growing on the rubber edge holding the windshield in place. The door croaked open, revealing a snoring Vladislav laying on his side. He was wrapped in the rough gray woolen blanket she had seen before, but this time wearing a new jacket. If one could call it new. It was in fact a khaki military jacket with a thick fur collar, like the ones she remembered the soldiers wearing when her parents watched the news about the war in Afghanistan against the Mudjahadin years ago. He had probably gotten it from a soldier in need of money or from a surplus store, likely without paying.

His jeans were a different story all together. Though not visibly worn at first, one could clearly the patches his mother had sewn on the inside to hide the fact it wasn’t denim fabric. The interior of his car was an equal mess. On the dash sat a half eaten piece of Buterbrod. The cassette player still sat on the dash, nailed directly into it with a uncovered piece of wire running down into the radio. Beside Vladislav lay his tumbler, beads of condensation water running down the metal. On the passenger seat sat a bottle of vodka although to Elena’s satisfaction he had only taken a small amount to spike his tea. Though she had a feeling his trunk was filled to the brim with old plastic containers filled with 90 pure samogon. He'd sell it out of his trunk after school, she had figured out that much.

His book bag lay on the backseat together with three or more tractor manuals, and a mix of nails, bolts and nuts. Despite the half dozen air fresheners that hung from the windshield mirror, the car stank heavily of livestock. Drool dripped from the corner of Vladislav's mouth, pooling in one of the backseat seat wells. Elena scoffed, he shouldn't be expecting a good morning kiss from her.

The three weeks she had been dating this to put it frankly, peculiar dirt poor son of an electrician and a nurse, had been quite a ride. Well, when she compared it to her somewhat comfortable life in Miroslavl now and the bit of money her parents had scraped together with their former positions as low level officials of the bygone Communist Party back when the Soviet Union had yet to collapse, Chernarus was yet to become an indepedent cduntry. While they lived in Novigrad. Well, they had lived there until three weeks ago

The main character in my story "Carrie" (19F), is a college student of Hispanic descent. She goes to the Caribbean with her family. During the trip, she attempts to befriend some other American teens by playing volleyball with them. One of these teens is named "Tom" (18M). Tom, thinking Carrie is a local, makes some indirect comments about her not playing well. Eventually, Tom figures out that Carrie speaks English, and begins to be nicer to her, teaching her to throw the ball and giving her encouraging comments.

Later on in the trip, Carrie and Tom meet again, because they share a mutual friend "Luke" (18M). Tom sees how beautiful Carrie is, and flirts with her, but Carrie is too dense to realize he likes her. Carrie ends up getting so drunk that Tom, Luke, and the rest of the gang escort Carrie back to her room. Carrie likes Luke, but Luke leads her on a little, and he ultimately rejects her. Carrie and Tom are friends at this point, but Carrie is very quiet after the incident with Luke. Tom asks her why she's so quiet, and he tries to get to know her better, asking her what she likes to do, etc.

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Fetzer

Fetzer is the bastard son of a petty nobleman and a leper, and his fading memory of them is shadowed by the abusive uncle who raised him. The uncle demanded much from Fetzer, but was continuously disappointed.

And so Fetzer endured a youth laden with rejection, loss, and violence. His failed pursuit of knighthood as a squire at Perilune Academy was his final attempt at normalcy. Self-reliant and impulsive, Fetzer struck out on his own with a dark confidence in his own survival. He stepped into the wider world carrying no expectations, only a deep-seated vengeance that smoldered like a hot coal within him.

He imagined himself taking his revenge against the faceless, formless entity that had guided his life of misfortune, by one day usurping its power. His disturbed thoughts and bitterness regressed when he stumbled upon the Order of the Candlestone.

In Master Arasemis he found a deep well of teaching that could further hone his significant skill with a blade and add some alchemical trickery. And in the other Candlestone recruits he found malleable peers that he could manipulate for his own ends. Particularly Marlan, with whom he grew close because of Marlan’s belief that Fetzer’s singular ability was the mark of a prophesied leader of Candlestone.

Although open about his lust for power, Fetzer is careful not to be too open with anyone about his darkest beliefs, making do with scratching his thoughts into a secret journal to keep his sanity. Over time, Fetzer’s willingness to elevate himself above the sacred aims of Candlestone attracts admonitions from Arasemis, but protection from Marlan.

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Context: Fetzer is a main character in one of my epic fantasy novels. This artwork is a hybrid of Midjourney and my own work in Procreate. More at r/Earthpillar

I have created a superhero that is rabbit themed, however, he is also Irish and Scottish and this is heavily to do with his character and stuff, and I learned that Ireland and Scotland don’t have any rabbit mythology but hare mythology, and they are two different species. I could make my superhero hare themed. However, I also want my character to have the mentor of the Chinese rabbit god. Does anyone have any idea what I could do? Is there a way I could do both?

I have this character who's an anti-hero bordering the villain line. Here's the backstory:

Adam Telmegara was born to the Realmlin tribe deep in the Northeastern region of the continents, his father was Maxarius Telmegara, a retired half-zombie hitman, and his mother was a local Druid named Iris. Adam's mother died when he was six and his father passed away from Tuberculosis at 12, this left Adam orphaned at a young age, but thankfully his father taught Adam everything he knew before passing away. This allowed Adam to survive many years on his family's estate without the need for adult supervision, however, this did cause mental issues and social anxiety in Adam.

Most of the time Adam is either too quiet or too quirky, sometimes he struggles to speak full sentences cause he's still shy or anxious to keep talking.

Adam joined his tribe's army at 14 years old, but he didn't see much action until he was 16. An Empire from another dimension invaded his tribe and enslaved his people. Adam was able to escape, but from that day onwards, Adam made a promise, that he would kill them "down to the last one!"

The Empire would continue to colonize various parts of the land, causing the Union (a coalition of tribes and kingdoms) to fight back. Adam joined the Union's army and rose to the ranks as a skilled fighter and military leader, and his Crusade of the West is legendary but also controversial.

He goes on to commit atrocities like killing Imperial colonists in mass, bombing colonies, forcing POWs into fields, executing surrendering soldiers, burning down colonies and plantations, and even his plan to destroy the Empire's homeworld (Attempted Genocide basically).

And his most controversial action was the castration of male POWs. But, it's important to know the context of it all.

When he killed Imperial colonists and burnt/bombed colonies, that's pretty typical of a general leading a war especially if those people invaded his land.

His forced labor of POWs isn't slavery, this was a common thing within the Union where they took Imperial POWs to do labor. Adam wasn't using them to profit, he forced them to work in the fields to gather food to provide for the slaves he liberated, and he only worked them for a few hours, much less than the other Union regiments which would force POWs to work for days nonstop as payback. When the war ended, Adam was much calmer at that point and gave the POWs compensation for their labor before sending them home. It was more like community service.

When he tortured people, those people were Officials, people who supported the massacre and enslavement of his people as well as owning Native Women as concubines.

That brings the biggest controversy was his castration of male POWs, it's heavily exaggerated, he only castrated like 60 people, and there was a reason for that.

Female POWs would be sold off as concubines for the elites and nobles, their treatment was horrific, and one noble named Vermillion started a company built off this idea. Vermillion himself owned Xhara, the Chieftess of Adam's tribe and the closest thing Adam had to a mother, as a maid/concubine. Vermillion was known for treating Xhara horrifically.

Nothing could justify the cruelty and violence he inflicted on those people, but it's understandable.

Adam also goes through a lot of development, he goes from being socially anxious and quiet to being more open and loud speaking to becoming this kind of messiah-like figure to most of his people, then he goes on to commit a lot of atrocities and even had plans to genocide the Empire's people, but then decides to back out on the idea once he sees the suffering the Empire inflicted onto their people especially when he frees his Chieftess who begs him not to do so.

Then Adam joins a band of Rebels to help him launch a counter-invasion into the Empire.

I have four characters that are linked with each other and I need help with giving them personality traits and making them interesting.

The four characters are Sanlion Jinzi, Caliban, Krotion Regulus and Samayena.

Here are their relation with each other: https://www.canva.com/design/DAGAB2WyDsA/G7TE_-DOvgQlcP9WolhfOA/edit?utm_content=DAGAB2WyDsA&utm_campaign=designshare&utm_medium=link2&utm_source=sharebutton

If you can’t access the link for some reason, here’s a brief description:

Sanlion is the son of Cabom and Aina when they married each other.

Caliban is a bioengineered son of Cabom when his Dna was stolen by the lunarians.

Krotion Regulus is the son of Cabom when the lunarians stole his Dna and used it to impregnate one of their own (their first plan was to create a lunarian prince but that plan was abandoned and they instead created Caliban)

Samayena is a creation/clone by Sanlion when he tried to use a powerful artifact. He has Sanlion’s powers and some of his memories.

Short description of them as characters:

Sanlion has a superiority complex and sees himself as “the most important person in the room” at all times. He’s physically weak and his ability is portal creation. At the beginning of the story, his goal is to make a name for himself and to secure a position of power. Basically, he wants respect. Later on, when he learns how weak he actually is and when he learns to grow from his immature mindset, he becomes a better person who wants to help his friends.

Caliban starts off as a curious creature that explores the world. His intellect is similar to a monkey in his first form. Another thing is that he likes to watch theater plays. In his second form, Cavitribot, he starts to form words and now engages with people and their daily lives. He not only watches how people act but also tries to copy it. Now, when he sees a theater play, he tries to mimic their moves and acting. In his third form, Catriom, he gains a massive boost in intellect and is now able to talk and have a strong personality. He’s very “active” when he talks. He moves his hands a lot and uses a lot of “big” words. Now, he actually tries to be in the plays that he watches. He wants to be the center of attention and the best whenever people watch him. This also leads to a bunch of mistakes when he tries to catch people’s attention. Finally, we have his final form, Catrimosa. As Catrimosa, he has a true god/hero complex and only sees other people as pawns or objects in his path. Whenever he watches theaters, he has a very “I could do better than all of them!” mentality. His goal now is just to become more powerful and to prove to other people that he’s the most powerful being in the world.

Krotion Regulus sees himself as a “rival” to Sanlion. He sees himself as the underdog in every situation while also having a desire to surpass Sanlion. He has always had this thought and envy of Sanlion ever since he learned about him. Deep down, this resentment comes from the fact that Krotion knows that he isn’t the “real” son of Cabom, he’s just an experiment that’s a part of the lunarians plan. He doesn’t want that. He desires true free will and in his mind, he can only achieve freedom when he becomes more powerful than the “true” son of Cabom.

Samayena knows that he isn’t Sanlion and that he’s just a “echo” of him. But he hates that, he resents Sanlion for creating him and he desires to become more than just an echo. He wants to be in a position where people will respect him. Basically, he wants to justify and give importance to his own existence. He always claims that he has nothing against Sanlion while also criticizing his every move. Ironically, by trying to be more than Sanlion, he becomes a lot like him (with the desire to secure a position of power)

I want help with anything that I might be missing or anything I should be thinking about when regards to these characters.

Also, Sanlion was born in 1827

Caiban was released/woke up in 1849

Krotion was born in 1829

Samayena was created in 1851 but is as old as Sanlion

I'm trying to design characters that satisfy audiences, but I have a few questions...

• What kind of character traits / personalities do people want to see?
• What kind of arc to people want to see?
• What kind of ethnicity or race should a character be for people to be satisfied?

These are some of my questions. Again, I want to make characters that satisfy the audience. So what do you think?

So I'm writing up a pilot for a show, in which I don't want to say lest I spoil it. But its about a group of 6 people dealing with mental problems whilst going on wacky adventures. It will revolve around 6 characters based on their colour scheme. And I just now realised that 3 of them share the same core problem.

(P.S I will only be referring them by their colour as I do not want this spoiled pre-maturely)

There's red who is a sort of Frankenstein mutant of sorts. An amalgamation of all different types of animals mixed into one (think Kevin 11 from classic Ben 10). Her core problem is that everyone seeing her as a monster due to her mangled appearance.

Then there's Green, A shapeshifting alien who masks her personality to whoever she's near. But nobody knows her original form and she is incredibly defensive about it. She is scared people won't like her for herself, so acts like someone else to mask their true self.

And finally we have Purple, A cybernetically enhanced bounty hunter who's obsessed with being perfect. So she tries to make her body more robotic, as she sees organic biology flawed and imperfect (think "the six million dollar mon" episode from futurama)

All of these girls have the same core problem of appearance and fitting in with society. While I do see all these girls bonding over their shared problem. I don't think their core messages are different enough from each other.

Once I start getting truly serious about this project. I plan to get actual professional help writing these characters. As an attempt to better understand and educate the masses about said mental problems. And I don't know if the 3 girls have distinguishable enough mental problems where it basically blends into the same message.

So What can I do with these character problems and make them more varied or less identical to each other?

So I've been working on a novel outline, to keep all of my characters and storyline intact while writing. I'm currently working on the main character's profile and am unsure how to go about some aspects. The main character is Lucifer, and for the most part they physically look like a female, but being a fallen angel, they don't have a gender or identify as a specific gender. They have no sexual desires, and the character has been on earth mingling with society for thousands of years. So I figure they will nonchalantly answer to any pronoun people they're interacting use for them because they're use to it.

The problem is how I write it when not in speech. I figured I can use "they/them" as much as possible, but sometimes it comes across as weird or forced. This is also a bit of a snag when it comes to how they present themselves in dress. They'll be going by the name Lucy for most of the story, so should I keep all aspects of the character's physical dressing/hair styles ect as gender natural as possible? I was thinking they could sway back and forward at times, depending on the situation, but I that might also be confusing.

Sorry if these are all dumb questions, I haven't written anything in a very long time, but I have been playing with this specific concept in my head for a few years now. I just don't want to be offensive or confusing to the LGBTQ+ community.

I'm kinda drawing the character profile a bit on myself. I've never really seen myself as either gender. But I'm biologically a female, so dress as such, just more on the plain tom-boy side in my day-to-day life, and try to dress more posh on occasion i do dress up. My inside circle always makes jokes that I'm not a guy or a girl, or that I'm "purple", instead of "pink" or "blue" (just to be clear, these jokes are not meant in a offensive way, and have even been used by some of my gay friends/family members as well). But I've also been discriminated by people of the LGBTQ+ community because I don't pick a identity other than what I am physically, saying I've been socially brainwashed because I was born in the 80's. So I'm trying to be careful I don't offend people with how I write the character.

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Hoshiko Amari - Art by me, Edelstein Storm

Hoshiko Amari / 甘利星子 (previously known as Satsuko Kuroyama or 黒山殺子) is a foreign exchange student from Japan. She transferred to Evergarden high school as a means to see more of the world outside of her own country. Unfortunately, when she started going to the town's high school, she was thrown into the whirlwind of the recent murder of football center Jared Adams. She quickly makes friends with Robin Rivers (16NB) who is an outcast. The two quickly form a relationship hidden from their peers, but the secret doesn't last long. Robin introduces Hoshiko to their friends, Anthony (14M), Jasper (17M), and Rayne (MC, 17M).

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Personality

Hoshiko's homelife was not the best, so she turned to watching the most famous idols in Japan. Her favorite groups were namely Momoiro Clover Z and Nogizaka48. When she moved to the US, she pursued her dreams in singing and dancing. She never likes to see others around her sad or upset, so she'll do anything in her power to make them happier; this trait makes Rayne her foil, because he seems to never feel anything other than "meh."

Background

In junior high, Hoshiko faced bullying for her "weeb" obsessions in idols and anime, despite the fact that it gave her a hope that she would survive her depression. Her parents were always gone at work and when they were home they were either sleeping or drinking, which upset Hoshiko quite a bit. When she moved to the US, she was hosted by the Amari's, who then adopted her and had her name legally changed to Hoshiko Amari from Satsuko Kuroyama.

Why did they adopt her?: Upon receiving news of her parents' neglect, the Amari's fought for custody, but they didn't have to fight much as her parents gave up custody almost instantly.

I have two main characters, they are love interests but that's not the main focus of the story, it's about the personifications of natural powers (planets, elements,...). The big problem I'm facing is that I feel like the characters are too similar; Character 1; Aurinko (yes, it's a bit on the nose but it's important for the story), he's the personified sun. It's very important to him that people are happy, but he's the literal sun so there lays a lot of power on his shoulders which results in him being socially awkward, since he always fears he is doing things wrong. But with people he's close to (his love interest and family) he is very sunshin-y, nice and open once he opened up which could collide with the second main character. Character 2; nameless as of yet. He's 'only' a normal human being, so he has an easy life. He is also a very happy and content person and while he's rather extroverted, his biggest weakness is his naivity because he thinks good of almost every single person; unless they've done some obvious bad things (murder), he cannot be mad at them. He's a history student and always loves to share his passion which is actually how they met (it's also one of Aurinkos interests) There's a lot of explanations behind their behaviour but obviously it would take some time in the story to get there and I fear it could be annoying to have two main characters who are too much alike?