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I’m kind of panicking since I’m submitting it tonight, so is anybody willing to look over it until before 00:00 EST?

Hi everyone, I’m currently a hs sophomore who’s trying to practice common app prompts, and because they stay mostly the same from year to year I might keep it mostly the same if it’s any good. Would anyone be willing to review it?

Does this suck? I am a senior in high school right now and have never really written a college essay, so I have no idea what it is supposed to look like. Any feedback would be greatly appreciated

Reflect on a time when you questioned or challenged a belief or idea. What prompted your thinking? What was the outcome?

I was raised in a religious household. My parents and I went to church every Sunday, and from the time I was 7, I was enrolled in a small, private Christian school, immersed in a tight, ideologically homogeneous environment. I stayed there for 6 years of my life, until the pandemic hit, causing the school to shut down. I was enrolled in a new school, but I participated solely online for the entirety of that school year. Ninth grade, my first year of high school, was the first time I went to this school in person.

I initially went into high school with the mindset that I would go in, focus on getting my diploma, and get out. I was not interested in social interactions with my peers, as at my old school I never had to create new relationships as they had already been created for me (after the school shut down, I had no means of communication with my previous friends). This mindset was extremely consequential to my mental health, and my grades suffered noticeably during that time. My harsh outlook on life made me critical of everybody around me, including myself, and I paid little to no attention to my peers if I wasn’t comparing myself to them in some way.

I continued on this path until my sophomore year, when a classmate of mine came up to me and began talking. Usually, I could make a little bit of small talk before reverting back into my shell behind my computer screen - that was not an issue for me. But this classmate simply did not stop talking to me. No matter how uninterested I seemed in what he told me (I was too socially anxious to communicate that I wanted to be left alone), he sat beside me, updating me on his day, his life, and what was happening in it.

Up until this point, I never was interested in what he had to say. Only after I realized I was stuck with him, I began to give him my attention. As time passed, I began to notice how similar his sense of humor was to mine, and how when he told me about his day, he asked how mine was too. I began thinking about how much it meant to me that somebody cared. I had not gotten any attention at school, or at home (my parents are good people, but much of their time and energy is focused on work, and raising my sister, who struggles with some mental health issues), which, over the course of a year of online school, made me shut down.

In the coming months I made massive changes in how I lived my life. I began to get excited about school. I started initiating conversations with my classmate, and as I got closer to him, the more he asked me how I was doing, what was going on in my life, what interests me, the more I told him. The more I told him, the more I understood about myself. I began to fear vulnerability less, and instead of seeing it as something to avoid, I began seeking it. I began making other friends, and as I write this essay nearly 3 years later, the community of people that I’ve had the opportunity to be a part of is one of the things that matters most to me.

The outcome of this experience enabled me to accept more people and also accept parts of myself, something I previously did not have the capacity to do. That is why more than anything else in my life, I want to help people the same way that my community helped me find myself. I want to have more experiences that change my perspective as well, I want to come into college to further expand my understanding of different ideas and communities.

I can't pay, so if anyone can review my essay for free, I would appreciate it.

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I finish all four drafts, but I don’t know what else to do. I’ve tried my best to polish it and have not been able to contact any of my teachers to read them through. And my counselor’s make it incredibly difficult to meet with.

I love writing with metaphors but I tried not to make any "extended metaphors". No need for an email, please DM!

any teacher/editor/college review person pls help me out here. im intl and we dont really write essays in school and am rlly struggling w/ weaving everything together and articulating it well. much appreciated!!

I have two possible essays but I’m unsure which one I should use.

The first essay is about challenges after moving, leadership and struggle at first with class schedule

The second essay is more about emotional depth and adaptation, using my dog as the main theme.

I feel that the first essay maybe is more academic and the second essay is to broad so I don’t know which one I should keep editing. Any advise or review?

International student here hoping to get into one of the ivy universities. Looking for someone to proofread and suggest/edit my essay content. I honestly don't know if my essay is answering the prompt effectively. I'd appreciate any form of feedback and constructive criticism! I will provide more context for my written choice of content if you need. DM me your credentials first, please! (Just want to make sure I'm seeking help from a trustworthy person, Bonus points if you're a freelance teacher/prof)

Any help would be appreciated!! Thank you!!

I was wondering if anyone knew a good, objective way to review your own essay. I'm not too trusting with online editors, and since it's the holidays, I really don't want to ask any teacher/friend I'm close with to help out.

Problem is I just rewrite each sentence to the point where it gets nowhere- how can I make my edits actually help my essay 😭

hiii, like the title says! i have two essays to decide between for the common app. i just need help on which would be a better representation of me and fits what admissions officers want to see, thanks!

Title is self explanatory, I would like feedback on my commonapp essay :-)

Is anybody able to review my common app essay? If so, please leave a dm or a comment.

title. i think my supplementals are bad and also sound like they were generated by chatgpt. anyone want to review them for me?

Hi! I have drafted a 570-word MBA essay and since this is my first essay, I would love it if someone eligible can review it and share feedback. Let me know!

Thanks!

I am currently applying as a transfer to UC Berkely (OOS) and I fear my essays are awful. Idk how rational these fears are though. looking for a second opinion.

Currently, I am writing essays for applications to many T20 Programs. I've shared my essay with a couple of peers and Ivy League mentors and they think it's beautiful and impactful however it's not good enough and doesn't capture my raw emotions. That's something I have a hard time doing in retrospect. there is so much I want to say but not sure how to translate it on paper. I would love to get assistance if that's possible. Thanks!

i need helpp. i heard various opinions about the 3rd prompt uc essay (greatest talent and skill). Some candidates used research and listening skills (conventional ones) but i was thinking of making makeup as my greatest talent and demonstrate how i evolved through the years. this is due to that one college guy said that the talent should be mundane but interestingly explained but idk now. Let me know what you think.

hi there! idk if it’s because i’m anxious for early results to come out, but looking back at my personal statement i feel like it’s not as interesting or creative as others… i mean it’s literally talking about a problem i saw & the impact im continuing to make to solve that problem today. aghhh i don’t know though because ive seen some amazing personal statements & mine is nothing like it😭😭😭

I'm currently a senior from Guam applying to college. I have written a college essay about my advocacy journey and I related it with how I hate when people spell my name wrong and the letter that everyone leaves out is a representation of the fact that I will not follow the crowd and, that I will refuse to be overlooked or underestimated. My friends whose siblings have gotten into schools like Stanford and NYU told me that my essay is CLICHE ASF and that I should toss it and restart. One suggested that I write about how I grew up on an island as a Korean and identify more as an islander. He also told me to add the fact that I am one of a handful of people on my island that still know the art of weaving. I guess that essay is more unique but I am not going to college to weave, I want to go to change the world. IDK what to do LOL. Does anyone wanna read my essay and give honest opinions?