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    Made a poem for the people in my life who give up so easily.

    Why am I still here? Everyone I relied on, idolized, even. They are all gone. Yet the one with a monster is still here. It's as if a million wars is better than one.

    Why am I still here? Endurance and tolerance is not a good thing. That is probably what led to their downfall. When you learn that truth, you go out in a blaze of glory.

    I keep questioning my existence. It's because the one told to die by his demons, somehow survives the longest. Does it make me strong? Oh god no. Does it make them weak? Also no.

    I keep questioning my existence. How come one simple setback gives you a reason to die? My life has only been setbacks, yet I'm alive. I thrive, I learned to cry, I learned to thrive.

    Why am I still here? I have a prolonged period of scars, so many scars that a novel can be read in braille. Yet one measly mark, and you give up, my friends? I taught you nothing, have I? All I taught was a lie?

    Why am I still here? I will never know. But what I do know is that I must continue to grow. Maybe my next set of friends will learn to grow. I wonder when those friends will show.

    Why am I still here? I. Do. Not. Know.

    https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/tA8NkcsRoC

    https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/1y4UrR5SFt

    1 Comment
    2024/11/15
    03:07 UTC

    2

    Fictional story about fictional events with fictional reasoning.

    The tongue has the power to speak to the heart.

    It can be very difficult to find the right words

    to say, even when we know exactly who we’re addressing.

    We are not as innocent in nature as our hearts.

    Getting it to open up is much harder than giving

    it a reason not to. It's afraid to slip up.

    Instead, we switch up—a heart pretty enough to stitch up.

    In a nightmare, this heart lives, counting the dead,

    hiding a secret monster from under the bed.

    It sounds like another cartridge dropping to forget,

    leaving holes in my chest, pumping instant regret.

    Your own heart being aced like a test. You’d think I wouldn’t need to spell out the rest.

    Alright, Johnny Test, that’s enough from your end. A wounded monster saying, "I should’ve gone for the head"

    is a great plan for a heartless man. Monster or not, a devil will give you details before putting out the bait.

    He isn’t looking for a cod or some clownfish. He found Nemo before he was lost and bet against his heart,

    flaunting his scar while rivaling him like a shark. He wasn’t underestimated or asked for his best joke.

    He was a fish compared to the ocean, battled for glory and sought as an opponent, earning the nickname "Sharkbait."

    Even in a kids’ movie, Nemo could drop whatever boring shit he was learning in first grade

    to continue learning the rest of his grade, now as keeper of his name and honored at the top of the food chain.

    You know, Nemo, I’m somewhat of a funny-looking fish myself.

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    1 Comment
    2024/11/15
    02:50 UTC

    1

    Midnight Pt. III

    so stay with me
    I know
    you’re late
    
    eerie
    it’s only eight
    and you’re
    already a
    filthy shade
    of grey
    
    I can see
    the moonlight
    so come bathe

    I

    II

    1 Comment
    2024/11/15
    02:47 UTC

    1

    thoughts as I sky-gaze

    If we’re only to get used to

    skies changing hues

    and horizons expanding

    to no standstills,

    then maybe I’d want to just

    retract my tears

    sleeping alongside raindrops

    and tree saps.

    Because look, how lucky are the birds

    for being just be;

    they do not have to be anything

    but the flier.

    For heavens forbid, I actually try

    much – my soils, to uproot –

    dare I? want more than what’s raw?

    Say, mirror in the sky,

    is this justly – how my very earth ties

    ...only to these drought seeds?

    https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/xNl4tA9Vdo

    https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/4gtqbSH7mI

    2 Comments
    2024/11/15
    02:08 UTC

    2

    Bat Thing

    So maybe you do shift

    A sightless contortionist of a

    Bat-like little woman

    Metamorphic flight, ego trip

    Bite off your hands, stretch the skin

    And sew them to your hips

    Glare, wide-eyed, into a whitened sun

    Listen to thunder in a resonant canyon

    And, in the everything, you’ll know nothing

    Then you’ll be airborne

    You freaky, perverted thing

    With your rippled flesh

    And your paper wings

    Tethered to a dusky sky

    Reclusive and unseeing

    Vicious girl, all so vain

    Caught between bird and man

    Tall, ungainly, mature for your Age

    You are a bat thing

    Fanged with reddened eyes

    Grotesque and screeching, starving

    Deaf, deaf creature of the night

    With no call to lead you

    And only astigmatic eyes to guide

    Neither the song of a lover

    Nor the colors of a rainbow

    Will touch you in your willful abstinence

    And in this sleepy, barren sorrow

    You hang nooseless

    Condemned to never know

    What you will not know


    feedback:

    https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/vM7l7Odhys

    https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/e0S5uZUIbX

    2 Comments
    2024/11/15
    01:59 UTC

    4

    Milk

    Ha! The Child’s eyes look like old milk—

    Nasty little bug—drowning in old milk.

    And sitting in a red seat,

    King cockroach wraps his little mandibles

    Around itty bitty globs of Light.

    /

    Every rainbow colour coagulates. Ha!

    In the child's old eyes.

    All Our beauty tears over bread knife hands—

    Messy cut of colour,

    Al dente spectrum. (pulled out by black)

    /

    Little like saucers. Ha! Like saucers.

    Like old black milk,

    With little hands poking.

    Sharp little lust for

    Light. For Light.

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    1 Comment
    2024/11/15
    01:58 UTC

    3

    A phantom love

    your hand was sweet, soft a catch glimpse in the bleak ocean you call your eyes your shadow a haunting dance your clothes enchanted lyingly intertwined watching the stars almost as far away as you are now your knifes in me again every twist a new betrayal your phantasmal joy springs I'm just a cheap thrill to you and your just everything to me

    https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/1fzwgno/the_sun_still_shines/

    https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/1fztc40/only\_writing\_about\_it\_makes\_it\_all\_ok/

    1 Comment
    2024/11/15
    01:48 UTC

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    a phantom love

    your hand was sweet, soft a catch glimpse in the bleak ocean you call your eyes your shadow a haunting dance your clothes enchanted lyingly intertwined watching the stars almost as far away as you are now your knifes in me again every twist a new betrayal your phantasmal joy springs I'm just a cheap thrill to you and your just everything to me

    https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/1fzwgno/the_sun_still_shines/

    https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/1fztc40/only\_writing\_about\_it\_makes\_it\_all\_ok/

    1 Comment
    2024/11/15
    00:53 UTC

    1

    Older Self

    One thing we all wish to know Is what we’ll come to be

    It can be what moves us foward But as a distraction from our need

    Because as time goes on It all stays the same

    Nothing really changes It’s all the same old game

    Look at yourself in the mirror And imagine your future self

    Because you’re looking right at it There is no time to tell

    there’s a race among the people To make their way in life

    To become a newer person Like a double edged knife

    And if you pay attention closely You’ll understand how

    Why wait for maturity When we’re our oldest selves right now

    Just a lil poem I wrote while thinking deep what do you think 😃 Also I think the structure might get messed up when I post this but whatever lol

    https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/TBqwsrQEEI

    https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/HJcfOg7xN2

    3 Comments
    2024/11/15
    00:44 UTC

    3

    Led to me.

    Do things happen for a reason?

    Days after she left me you appeared— My eyes shifted to you like a child’s seeing a diamond necklace.

    Were you led to me? Do things happen for a reason?

    I lingered near you, waiting for an opportunity to speak, but you walked over and approached me.

    We spoke, I felt an instant connection. “There’s something about you,” we both said.

    Were you led to me for a reason?

    I fell so hard, but you didn’t.

    Do things actually happen for a reason?

    I guess I’ll wait and see.

    https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/vBAb9m2DmU

    https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/FoYr6rKTlu

    2 Comments
    2024/11/15
    00:19 UTC

    1

    A Marvelous Milk

    some spirit possesses us
      from soup too soon in sinking
    in haste albeit, beleaguered by brother
    
    our gut we girdle for garnish's gain
      while wasting wine, we wane
        in our want and wanting, we whine
          unsteady and unsound
    till we drown
    
    now which tonic to take?
      while wasting on wine
    unsure and undecided
    
    beleaguered in bed
      girdled, gleaming and garlanded
        engrossed by Girth
          we gape and gorge
    on Hordes we whore
    
    our lust and longing
      leaves us least
        we shall not rise as yeast
    but shall take the Beast
    
    Up hind
      we hinder
        To Him most Haughty
          Huge and Hung
            Veins Vivacious and Virulent
              Pulsing and Proud in Posture
    we vie for His Vigor
    
    The Beautiful Bustling Bull, Bulging, Black, and Burly
      Brushes from beyond the brow
        and through our bow
          now Beating across our backs
            we squeal and squirm
              for Stud Soo Stern
                from skeg and stern
                  in ecstasy we yearn
                    to take without turn
                      A Tonic to Tamp our teething
    A Marvelous Milk we Moor

    https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/1grgufz/need_honest_reviews/

    https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/1gri0xn/all_atop_a_wearied_world/

    4 Comments
    2024/11/14
    23:59 UTC

    3

    They came from the sky

    https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/ceHftkiCCu

    https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/CzHEh8YB5X

    They came from the sky

    Falling slowly like snow

    I knew this day would come

    But how it turned out

    No one would have known

    They numbered in the millions

    Their faces look familiar

    The world stopped and gazed in wonder

    As they arrived a feeling stirred in all

    For some it was hope

    For some dread

    What is that symbol they bare

    It's a swastika

    We got space Nazis instead

    3 Comments
    2024/11/14
    23:38 UTC

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    All atop a wearied world

    When the sky seeped it's bloodied clouds

    Above the gathering and raucous crowds

    Who slept atop a gaping gorge

    Deep beneath the abandoned forge

    Where we swung our hammers into steel

    Working hard to earn the meal

    To fill our cavity and bring us to

    Dreamy nights of lonesome few

    Thoughts of good or ones of peace

    Replaced, instead, by lathered grease

    Smeared on the banks of a rotten shore

    A rancid river to it's hateful core

    Grease to burn and land to steal

    Bones to break and skin to peel

    From faces trapped in infinite pain

    Watched by the vagrants on the train

    Pleading for mercy, all in error

    For the lords won't forgive atop this tearful Terra

    Feedback:

    https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/1fx824x/arrogance/

    https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/1fxcrf8/mental_break/

    3 Comments
    2024/11/14
    23:08 UTC

    4

    NEED HONEST REVIEWS

    Helloo so basically i know nothing about poetry you can say But i was just sitting and suddenly some lines came into my mind and i made a small poem Its actually for my girlfriend i made it while thinking about her i aint a professional i just want some feedback from the people who actually Inow about poetry and poems and all So my poem is actually called

    "You are perfect"

    You're like the sunrise after a long winter's night, You're like the first rays of sunlight that hit the face and make it glow, You're like the warmth of the sun on a cold day, You're like the light of hope in a dark tunnel, Like a star in a world full of space, Like a beacon of hope.

    Your smile is like a charm to my soul, It holds the power to make a dead heart alive, The power to make a war stop, And the power to make a stone melt.

    Your voice is like peace to my soul, A medicine to my longing pain, Calmness for my mind, And a melody for my ears.

    Your laugh makes the flowers bloom, Makes my heart skip a beat, Puts my soul to joy, And makes the world a brighter place.

    (I just want to know if it's any good because i need it to be good before reading it to my girlfriend)

    https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/L4N7dz841V

    https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/CKW8J239QL

    5 Comments
    2024/11/14
    22:14 UTC

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    Uninvited

    You came again, creeping in,
    unasked, unwanted, filling the air.
    I see you. I feel you.
    You’re relentless, aren’t you?

    I push back, tell myself you’re nothing,
    just a shadow, a passing fog.
    But you’re clever, aren’t you?
    You don’t need words, you don’t need reason,
    just a slow seep, like ink spreading in water.

    I fight you.
    Try to hold myself in the light, to feel the warmth,
    to remember what clear days feel like.
    But you pull, you press, you linger.
    And I feel myself giving in, just a little,
    leaning into the weight of you, the quiet.

    Maybe it’s easier this way,
    to let you settle in, let you stay a while,
    to sink into the comfort of what’s already known.
    I hate that thought, hate how you make it feel simple,
    like slipping into cold water
    and letting the numbness spread.

    But here you are, filling the room.
    I can’t ignore you, can’t fight you forever.
    So maybe I’ll let you stay,
    just for a moment, just until I remember
    how to breathe again without you.

    https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/NDMtyXoGjL https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/0Lje5hGHo1

    5 Comments
    2024/11/14
    22:07 UTC

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    The Red and Pink Painting

    I have heard it said

    That hell is other people

    Backwards that, I think

    A mans hell is himself

    Adams Asmodeus is in the mirror

    And his salvation is in the company of others


    For what is the measure of but one man alone?

    Is it the number trips around the Sun he’s survived?

    The heft in kilos of dead weight he could carry?

    The miles of sand or soil he dragged himself over?


    Pardon me if I’m a little scatter-brained


    A man shot himself yesterday

    A boy, actually, I think

    Painted the wall with his thoughts


    Having been alone in a room with them

    And the closest thing to comfort

    A cold nine millimeter and it’s bark-song

    Held tight in his unshaking hand

    That broke his teeth before

    Drilling a small borehole in the wall Behind him


    It was surrounded by rolling drips of reds and chunks of pinks


    Like an homage to this painter

    Whose works I mostly dont remember

    That left a single perfect black dot

    On every canvas she used


    I never had learnt what that meant


    I have also heard it said

    That the author is dead

    Bang on, I think.

    This self portrait by a young artist,

    His string cut short by Atropos,

    We’ll now never see

    Any explanatory annotations for


    He wouldn’t be the first to leave dark

    Fantastic Vision on walls

    Intended to go unseen

    Wordless suicide notes to no one.

    Depicting a mental state we can

    Never fully appreciate


    I try now to learn, I think

    From that kid who was well beyond the brink

    But all that goes through my mind

    Is the thought that there's no more

    hell left for him to find

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    I am still trying to figure out how to format things properly on reddit, I apologize for that

    1 Comment
    2024/11/14
    21:41 UTC

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    Gotta be me

    People bother me again, To be everyone but me.

    How can I survive, In a body that is not me.

    People bother me me again, To worry about who I love.

    How can I survive, With a baby that is not me.

    People bother me again, To be with god or be damned.

    How can I survive, If I’m wondering how to be good.

    People bother me & I couldn’t tell who to be or how to survive with no sense of direction.

    What else can I be, If I could only be me.

    I need to have a dream, a dream that is me, where I get to be so dang free!

    To do it or die, Who else can I be, But me.

    https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/txsv8Se269

    https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/ooNzedbW7n

    2 Comments
    2024/11/14
    21:31 UTC

    3

    Nana 0 Nana

    Seven is the unlucky, Zero is not, Seven is yucky, Together we’re not.

    Can people be lucky? I think so not. Can i be unlucky? Maybe i was.

    Was 0 worth me? Was he the slut? You liked my plea? I think so, not?

    The wind is warm, The lake rocks, Unlucky seven We ran out of luck.

    Together for 5 and more to come, This ends here, now we are done.

    https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/JWjgpTzJVa

    https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/d8x5ixsR01

    3 Comments
    2024/11/14
    21:15 UTC

    2

    Working Title (Introspection/Self-Awareness?)

    (I don't actually have a title for this piece if you want to suggest something)

    One

    You always are, always have been, and always will be, acutely aware of the way you might look to other people.

    Even when you are alone you will feel this way.

    Is there a strand of hair out of place?  Is your shirt wrinkled? Would someone else be able to smell what you can smell?  Under your arms? Between your legs?

    Two

    You like to go to the laundromat near your house well past midnight.  You think that if no one is there you might spend less time wondering if the face you see in the mirror is really yours.

    You like the way the washing machines and tumble dryers thump rhythmically and how it is always the same.  You like the smell of detergent and the way the neon storefront looks through the steamed window panes.

    You like the cat that sometimes sleeps outside the front doors and the way his black fur looks blue when bathed in florescent lights.

     

    Three

    You separate the colors of your clothes into lights, darks and whites.  You fill a cap full of liquid detergent.  You worry you poured too much and that suds will pour over the floor.

    You pour half the detergent back into the bottle.

    You see a man smoking a cigarette under the streetlamp across the street.  You wonder if he can see you through the steamed windows and the glare of neon against glass.

    You do not have enough quarters for three loads of laundry.

    Four

    You have to walk across the street, past the man and the cigarette, to get to the convenience store behind him.  There they will give you change for the twenty you have in your pocket.

    They’ve done it before.

    So you walk, wondering if you should put your hands in your pockets or if that makes it look like you are hiding something.

    You walk past the man and the cigarette and hope that he does not look up at you.

    You wonder if he thinks his face looks like a mask when he looks into a mirror.

    Five

    When you get into the convenience store, you notice a light is flickering.  It gives the tile floors and spinning slushy machines a dreamlike quality that you appreciate. 

    You like it when the world doesn’t feel quite real.

    You want to immediately ask for change so that you can go back to the safety of the laundromat but you know that you should buy something.  It’s the polite thing to do.

    Six

    You debate with yourself weather to buy a bag of barbeque chips or a payday candy bar.  They are the only two things you like at the store.

    The potato chips will leave powdered spices on your fingertips but the payday candy bar will leave caramel between your teeth.  You are not sure which of these will be more uncomfortable.

    You decide to buy both so that you can get your change and leave.  You can decide which you’ll eat later.

    Seven

    You bring your items to the front counter and unravel your twenty.  The man behind the counter is friendly and the whites of his eyes are tinged red.

    You don’t like the way he looks at you.  You don’t like the way his fingers brush the palm of your hand when he gives you your quarters.

    You don’t like the way his mouth is disjointed from his face when he tells you to have a nice night.

    Feedback:

    https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/1gqrakj/comment/lx514bo/

    https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/1gqypd0/comment/lx504vi/

    2 Comments
    2024/11/14
    20:15 UTC

    1

    Mr. Smiley

    By evening’s veil, when dusk descends,

    There walks a shadow none calls friend.

    A grinning mask, a lurking wraith,

    Who trails with steps both soft and chaste.

    They name him "Mr. Smiley," though,

    His face no warmth, his gaze aglow—

    Eyes like embers, hollow, deep,

    That watch as Emma stirs from sleep.

    The schoolyard’s bell, the dim-lit street,

    The haunted echo of her feet—

    She feels the weight, the breath, the leer,

    Of something vile, of something near.

    Oh, Emma, pure, with innocence bright,

    Her laughter lost to creeping night.

    For in each mirror, pane, or glass,

    His grin reflects as shadows pass.

    She turns to see, and none are there,

    Yet senses whispers haunt the air.

    A tale unspoke, a ghostly sound,

    Of dark obsessions, tether-bound.

    And Mr. Smiley, foul and sly,

    Will haunt her steps till day she dies—

    A phantom smile, forevermore,

    Bound to shadows on her door.

    https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/4FVbElRNSz

    https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/ocBdhi2Zis

    3 Comments
    2024/11/14
    18:40 UTC

    2

    Address

    These pieces
    Of my heart and yours
    Arranged on the floor
    In fours
    Scores of our victories and losses
    Seven years ago, we started
    We faught it long and hard
    Should we lay out our cards?
    Surrender here while the stars observe us?
    They heard us fuss and fight and cuss
    Now we discuss our treaties thus,
    We have our articles
    Describing the particle nature of our union
    Old feelings sticking to us like barnicles, u and I
    Two different letters.

    https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/vMbANU3Fd6

    https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/jRaqbzyzd1

    4 Comments
    2024/11/14
    17:46 UTC

    3

    I Failed You

    I don't think I can do it

    I can't pull the trigger

    to save you

    save me

    I've tried and failed

    I've put myself in many situations

    I can't even picture saving us

    I've let you down

    for this

    We will be inconvenienced

    Why you should smoke when you write : r/OCPoetry

    Void : r/OCPoetry

    4 Comments
    2024/11/14
    17:40 UTC

    5

    Void

    Void

    I’m scared. I used to believe she could fill The emptiness in my chest, Heal my lonely soul If she were here with me.

    But now, I’m scared. I’m not sure, if even she Could fill this endless void, Or heal the darkness inside.

    Can she lift this emptiness? Can she light the darkness inside? Will these feelings leave, If she’s by my side?

    I don’t know anymore.

    https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/pz5e7lmhcj https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/xXVwkFOGed

    9 Comments
    2024/11/14
    17:12 UTC

    35

    Why you should smoke when you write

    Why you shouldn’t smoke when you write

    So I have this small plight, you see

    That when I put pen to paper and write

    Sometimes I’ll blow through a bowl or three

    Untill I’m blurring my sight

    And starting on a slurring spree

    As my amateurish alliteration addiction arrives aright

    It does devastating damage to my diction

    and seriously sabotages some already sophomoric syntax

    My admittedly meager metaphors manage to be messier or merely missing

    Like a painter who forgets about perspective or a poet who forgets about… metaphor

    Rhythms rather rough already are reduced to reckless irregularities

    Rhymes arrive at random times without their schemes in tandem with any themes

    (Editors note: how many times can I rhyme rhyme with time?)

    But still I’ll smoke ten times a day

    Without ever letting editing get in my way

    And ya know, people always say that drugs are fuel for art

    I’ve never believed it, I say inspiration is from the head and heart

    So it might be putting the dead horse before the cart

    But I hope y’all will say, “he had to have been high for this part”

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    22 Comments
    2024/11/14
    17:08 UTC

    1

    Goals and Dreams

    Thoughts of the ideal,
    -——White canvas to inspire.
    The trudge of dedication,
    ——Lifetime worth of progress.
    Materializing abstractions,
    ——-Well served purpose.
    Blueprints for Success,
    ——-Guidance for the Unknown.

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    2024/11/14
    16:15 UTC

    2

    Inward Drift

    Without sight, I drift inward
    from half faces that half-turn,
    from voices polite but thin as air,
    shallow as the bright masks I’ve only ever known.
    They laugh like water sliding past a stone,
    and I sit still, a shadow they tolerate,
    hovering, but never heard, never held.
    Here, in this realm, I am myself,
    detached in a connectionless connection,
    invisible as the space between my words.

    The dark I see is silent music,
    no sound, no colour to pull me back.
    There exists a beauty here, pure and deep,
    like the hum of stars I'll sense but never see,
    each one distant, detached, but burning on inside,
    scattered pieces in their silent orbit,
    probing, indifferent to my distant looking or not.

    When reflections on their screens mean more
    than the reflections within, in my flaming eyes,
    it becomes my duty to become
    a shell of who ‘me’ is,
    for the sake of inhumane reason.
    If I stayed here, lost in this divine black,
    would they even strive to rekindle my fire?
    Or would I pass, unnoticed as ever,
    a turn of luck in a story unknown to everyone else?

    I wonder if the sky knows its stars,
    or if they blaze alone, nameless, for some reason,
    their light bright on who might see it but I will not sense.
    I could ask, but it feels sacred not to know,
    just illogically, but yet beautifully fighting on in here,
    in a night that holds all thought
    against a sky that holds no truth

    On a star that might be too dim to see from afar,
    but yet never fails not to know
    that the story waiting to be told
    holds too little light for them
    and so logic determines that I

    will leave no trace.

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    3 Comments
    2024/11/14
    15:18 UTC

    16

    When I was 14

    When I was 14

    I cut into my skin

    Trying to break my heart

    Using shards of broken tin

    .

    Two years later

    I wonder if I should try again

    Nothing has changed
    Everyday

    Everything the same

    .

    Only distractions

    Trying to keep me happy

    To stop me from taking the same directions

    To get to the same destination

    .

    Now I think it was only a roundabout way

    To the same location

    Overcast skies

    Make me think

    I’m not anywhere at all

    .

    And I think in 20 years it’ll be just the same

    And my whole life was just a journey to the same destination

    That I was at so many years before

    I think I’ll take the shortcut

    I think I’ll just go.

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    20 Comments
    2024/11/14
    14:44 UTC

    2

    I Haven't Given This Title (Looking for one). Also, it's incomplete. Would Love Feedbacks

    1. Stabbing The Queen

    Near the candle's fluttering light, 

    Stood a sombre Prince now grieved

    Standing near a grave with his might

    Bearing the gloom he had conceived.

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    The stars look down with scorn

    as omens imbue in that sombre place

    reflecting dreams that war had torn

    of glories that once had their grace. 

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    With the touch of the passing breeze,

    His mother's memory softly whispers

    Melting the mountains of guilt with ease

    With tears to soothe those bygone years.

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    How once she ruled over as the Head

    with grace and fairness beyond compare

    blessing her subjects where honour led

    and blessed their lives with special care. 

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    When their lives were cloaked with gloom

    She'd glisten like the Sun, pure and bright.

    Her intellect would keep away the doom

    Assisted by her vision of a noble light

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    Neither fame nor power'd mar her grace

    For under her, Paradise found its peace

    And besides the respect that held its place.

    All the wrong ambitions did decrease. 

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    But her fate decreed a dreaded way

    As jealousy stirred the coven's unrest,

    Despite the grace that bade loyalty to stay,

    The Queen was unkindly stabbed in her chest…

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    1. The Turmoil Within

    The news pierced like a dagger's blow

    leaving the Price gasping with a stare.

    With a face pale as white as the snow

    as grief shattered him beyond compare

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    This corpulent betrayal destroyed his frame

    as he came to terms with his woe.

    In him, vengeance burnt like an eternal flame

    seeking justice in the world now at a low. 

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    So, from the trenches of gloom's weight

    He rose, fledgling, yet with sturdy eyes

    To spread the fire fuelled by his fate, 

    Seeking justice beneath the hostile skies. 

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    To honour the Coven with public disgrace,

    He decreed the people to gather near

    To reveal the truth for rumours to erase

    And seek revenge with no room to fear.

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    O friends of Paradise! Lend me your ear

    I'm here not to mourn but to endear

    The Queen who ruled with grace and might

    Whose steps once filled us with delight. 

    The coven, to satiate their jealous pride,

    assassinated her, turning against our side

    When did she fail to fulfil your needs?

    When was her advice, not a wisdom's seed?

    Neither power nor wealth she sought

    Every single act of hers was a noble thought. 

    A figure as bright as the Sun for every eye

    Did she deserve in the Coven's hands to die?

    Those hands that reek of her blood, 

    took her away in this muddled flood.

    And yet for her worth, her grace and heart-

    Would you not tear the Coven apart?

    Look at the throne! Cloaked in despair

    Crying helplessly for justice, free and fair

    With silence speaking volumes, she cannot;

    Her crown shows what the coven forgot!

    Oh, you stars! You witnessed her reign

    Still, why don't you bleed in pain? 

    For she was more than you could behold-

    Her value is more than the tales told. 

    And the coven's hands are still red,

    Smeared in blood, yet they're unafraid.

    Shall we, her people, bow our heads low

    Whilst the Coven walks with no fear to show? 

    For she ruled with pride on her face, 

    Still, the Coven killed her in disgrace.

    O Citizens! I stand here as her lone heir-

    Shall we let the Coven breathe our air? 

    Look at her wounds, crying at her deed

    How they glisten in the shades of greed.

    The hands that took her away, 

    I will steal your peace every passing day.

    The Coven fell for their intentions true

    and let their envy tear all we knew.

    Her crown's blooded, and we, her kin, 

    you'd kowtow them and let them win.

    So has come the hour to rise

    And let her blood stain the skies!

    Let not her soul in injustice lie

    Seeking answers from the fiends sly.

    Hold your torches! Take your cries

    As justice calls where the moral dies.

    We will fight to meet their shame

    And burn the altar of righteous flame.

    If we love her, we must now act

    We can't rest as they're yet to retract

    Let vengeance sing our song and creed

    To restore peace, our hearts must bleed!

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    3 Comments
    2024/11/14
    14:28 UTC

    14

    My Body

    I hate my body I won’t apologise for that This masculinity has been forced upon me from birth And I’m expected to be grateful? I feel guilt for wishing to reject my privilege But what I would give to not despise what stares back

    Everything

    Take it all

    Strip back my shape and flesh Rip and tear through gut and bone until all that’s left is my core of being

    Yearning

    Grasp with aching hands Squeeze and mutilate Reform and reshape I’ll come out better or I won’t come out at all

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    11 Comments
    2024/11/14
    13:45 UTC

    2

    Orpheus and Eurydice

    He looked at his beautiful bride
    His lyre tucked in hand
    Her face a work better than Venus
    Her eyes like some sapphires
    He took her on a midday walk
    Into the tall grass yonder
    Little did he know of the perils that
    Would make him walk on fire

    Orpheus led Eurydice
    To the cypress grove
    She fell into the grass like a doll
    Before reaching the slope
    Her face as blue as cornflowers
    A bleeding gash on her thigh
    An adder winding back into it's hole
    And thus Eurydice died

    Orpheus bellowed in grief and sorrow
    A sound louder than Pan's pipes
    And wrought himself an iron will
    To see his wife alive
    He trudged up steep Etna with
    Nothing but his lyre

    He sought out the river Styx and
    Met the daemon Charon within
    He strummed his lyre and he had passed
    For his music had
    Nothing but goodwill

    Oh, how the sound destroyed his heart
    Showing his feeling from within!
    Charon fell to no weapon
    But a man with prodigious skill
    The moment he crossed the river Styx
    His eyes deep in a trance
    A snarl came from the shadows like
    A monster that wants to kill

    Cerebrus rose out of the gloom 
    His three heads with mouths bared 
    Teeth dripping with venom 
    A scorpion's tail on his back 
    He shook his mane and 
    Reared his head 
    For no mortal had passed him yet!

    But Cerebrus fell with a thud
    And cried in a voice so shrill!
    Orpheus strolled casually by
    As though nothing had happened

    He passed the the Fields of Asphodel
    And made the spirits weep
    Even the Isle of Blest was affected
    Suffocated by his grief
    He passed through the halls of
    Hades's palace
    Made of jewel and bone
    And knelt below the dark lords throne
    And strummed his lyre like before

    Even mighty Apollo wept
    At the heart wrenching notes
    Orpheus's voice was better than the Muses
    Who would praise him galore
    He laid his wish bare and broken
    And asked for his request to be fulfilled

    The Dark lord wept with melancholy
    While Persephone praised his hymns
    Hades granted Orpheus's wish
    But not without a little strife

    He couldn't look at the love of his life
    Not till he reached the surface
    And if he did, she would fall
    Along with the lord's goodwill

    He trudged up through Sisyphus's hill
    His eyes fixed on the Zenith
    And Eurydice walked behind him
    No sound came from her lips

    And Orpheus began to worry
    His ears were begging for sound
    His lyre was lost a few feet back
    He couldn't hear Eurydice as well

    Slowly he gave into temptation
    His mind in swirling fragments
    He turned to look at his now-doomed bride
    Who screamed against he will

    Slowly, she began to fall
    Her wedding dress billowing
    The mountain crumbled under his feet
    As Orpheus realized his folly

    He fell into the great depths below
    His face in shock and fear
    And here ends the tale of Orpheus and Eurydice
    A tale of sorrow and goodwill

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    5 Comments
    2024/11/14
    12:20 UTC

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