A complete nooby. But not trying to noob. I wrote this 1 page today. Want to get busted with feedback of you all. Am i writing correctly? How can i improve the mystery and realism?
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1pBedZ1Kx33a-_9j2GPHDuaqHwm7MJBffiqTNQKgoa5k/edit?usp=sharing

everything is welcomed

This is my first horror short that I would like to film someday. The script might not be great, but I tried to implement the horror feeling into the actual script so that whoever reads it can also be emerged.

The main character has no dialogue, so I'd appreciate feedback on what you guys think on a script with hardly any dialogue. This is only my third revision, so I do plan on making changes, but this is the first revision that actually had an ending.

This script does have actual visuals that I drew to give a better idea of what I was/am going for along with notes. Thanks for reading!

https://docs.google.com/document/d/13k7R7ZoN4nWQ-pNe3kfCNsp5cpJrvyMag7r8kEYXjdk/edit?usp=sharing

Hey everyone!

I'm looking for feedback on my dark comedy feature script, "Doubt the Creature and the Clown." It's about a struggling musician named Harry who navigates the absurdities of the music industry, dead-end jobs, and his eccentric bandmates while battling his own self-doubt.

Logline: When a frustrated musician's drummer suffers a freak accident that turns him into a rhythmic savant, the band sees a chance to finally get noticed, but their pursuit of fame takes them down a bizarre and chaotic path.

Target audience: Fans of dark comedies with quirky characters and a touch of the surreal.

The Script: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1XiLvEY4ryXeG937Kp8H17rEsyGVXyO8O/view?usp=sharing

Any feedback would be much appreciated,

Thanks!

A few months ago, I decided to rekindle the creativity I had for storytelling in my youth. Life put it on hold for a while, but now I’ve finally had the chance to bring it back from that hibernation.

My first story is a short one targeted to a young audience, titled The Curse of the Blood Moon. To make it accessible to more people, I've created an audiobook in English.

The Curse of the Blood Moon (English, Audiobook)

🎧 [Listen here on YouTube]

The Curse of the Blood Moon (English, PDF)

📖 [Read the PDF]

I was wondering if this has potential to become an interesting script to target a young audience. Let me know what you think!

Logline: When the island is overthrown by a coup and turned into a regime, a man works with others who are discontent with the new rule in order to rebel against it and keep his brother safe.

Pages: 49

https://drive.google.com/file/d/103xlZvqn8_35Bk9GDcB0StWaYzUZJl3r/view?usp=sharing

Thanks everybody!

Looking for a screenwriter who is willing to work for free/deferred pay on a script idea of about 10-15 mins. The goal is to shoot in December & put it on Film Festivals so time is of the essence. Hoping to use this film as a medium for connecting and to get into Film Festivals. Genre: Thriller - Drama/Romance, DM me ASAP for more Info.

Title: Chivalry is Dead Format: Short Genre: Psychological Thriller Page Count: 12 Logline: A young woman spirals into obsession as her twisted relationship with a serial killer drives her to commit her own murder, sealing their bond in blood. Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/14bjicJqhdFX2h10BKjzQAnd_lLJ3_vJT/view?usp=drivesdk

I would appreciate any and all feedback, critiques, commentary, and suggestions!

Lately been doubting script and need to go back to drawing board. So I need a fellow writer who I can bounce ideas back and forth on to take the concept and perfect it. Leaving a link to the incomplete outline and pm if interested and I'll send a pdf of latest draft. It's only 10 pages.

Film is called Mind Reader:

"You can read your friend’s mind, dare to pay the price?"

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1x1zZBOhaO82kdrs2fi7NHjHdL_Up7RwwFP0-LbuZwIo/edit?usp=sharing

Stitched

LOGLINE: When an abusive father returns to reclaim his family, a protective grandmother invokes an ancient ritual to shield her granddaughter, binding her father to the land in a way he’ll never escape.

I don't remember if I shared this before, but it's a little horror short I originally wrote in 2019. I've rewritten some of the descriptions, improved some dialogue, and cleared up some intentions.

Enjoy!

Title: Worse Things Have Happened To Better People

Format: Feature

Page Length: 110

Genres: Comedy/Crime/Roadtrip/Drama

Logline: Out of work, out of money, and out of options. Two brothers resort to a cross country robbery spree to pay off creditors who threaten to repo their family fishing boat.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1EMQeT64UYvdYOLdmB0I7S1UQUO-YtrRM/view?usp=sharing

Would love any feedback anyone has to offer! Thanks in advance for your time.

A 55-year-old, unmarried & asthmatic food delivery lady races to complete 30 orders in 10 hours to earn an incentive & fulfill her 85-year-old widowed mother's Valentine’s Day wish of getting her late husband's name tattooed.

Page Count : 110

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1e32OcGYobOQWmPVKXrkAfE3H09q2TT5D/view?usp=drivesdk

Hi all,

I've turned a feature into a six-part mini-series, due to concerns with the completed draft's pacing and length. I'm wondering how it reads when it's broken up into shorter episodes. I haven't used the teaser/act formatting, as it's not essential, but please feel free to give feedback on that.

My concerns are engagement, character, dialogue. If anyone gets to episode 2, I'm worried about it having too much exposition, and would love any feedback around that.

LOGLINE: An ex-con attempts to pursue a quiet life, whilst his past deeds are dramatized in a hit television series. But when a scandal erupts involving high-level political figures, threatening the stability of the Melbourne underworld, a link to the ex-con’s past makes it harder to resist the pull back to his old ways.

Episode 1: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1ve6aRS47bchLsHGgQCkvds9B0vlC39b-/view?usp=sharing

Episode 2: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1T2DYc5-8KztEllU_g6FG_41LHPN3_niQ/view?usp=sharing

Episode 3: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1XL6w8Eso8WunbFp1hwFHdIXzL9eibKfj/view?usp=sharing

As the end of October approaches, we would like to thank everyone who participated in REDDIT READIT month. Those still interested, please note that the offer ends on October 31st at 11:59 PM. The edited scripts, including feedback, will be returned starting November 1st. Thank you!

Title: Can You Stay Late?

Format: Feature (first act)

Genre: Horror with elements of dark comedy

Logline: Trapped alone in a corporate office after hours, an overworked receptionist must battle her toxic coworkers and navigate a deadly zombie outbreak as she fights her way down sixteen floors. (Comparisons - Get Out Meets Die Hard)

Other: It's my first attempt at something horror-ish.

Please note as it's contained and follows one woman:

• I reference items I wouldn't normally. These become of use later so they need to be called out.
• I understand sluglines are usually DAY/NIGHT but on recommendation from another writer I'm experimenting with the usage of time

Not sure if I've done either of the above effectively but at the very least I hope it’s not the worst thing you’ve ever read.

EDIT: FYI - Someone seems to be going through and downvoting anyone who says anything nice and any of my comments. Oh Reddit, you keep me on my toes!

I appreciate everyone who read/reached out and I’ll get to making few changes :)

This is the first 10 pages of my horror(ish)/western feature, Tarnation Station. (10 pages specifically for college application purposes)

I would greatly appreciate any feedback or advice on the story quality. Did you want to continue reading it or would you have read more past 10 pages? If not, why? My biggest concern is if the storytelling shows promise/is engaging, but any feedback would be amazing.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1JtZb1-A5BHhGHWlDqPYGnlnstsOdS6Y9/view?usp=drivesdk

Title: Baggie

Genre: Drama

Logline: Two teenage friends stumble upon a mysterious baggie, leading them into a surreal drug fueled night.

This is also a short and would love to hear what yous think, and if you’s would like to read the screenplay when it’s finished, thanks a lot.

this is just a test to see if i like this kind of story and if the screen play itself is clear and a good read good enough to film as well.

LOG LINE-- Lucas cane and his family are group of hackers and after one of their scores goes wrong Lucas must save his daughter from a crime family and possibly his own wife.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1YRPFdU1f63ziDdOwXKqaDEo5zC8ygij0G01hocBtnd8/edit?usp=sharing

looking for feedback on interesting story and characters i need feedback on the way its written but i haven't had the time to take it out of google docs so excuse that please. please let me know if there is any typos or anything that just seems really and truly hard to understand

A bit nervous putting this on here, but I do need the feedback.

Logline: As a dying man dreams of spending his final moments with his wife, the God of Dreams arrives to reclaim the stolen power that sustains his dream.

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1QtiqHqMkXyYC9FEEuN-lf4aiqRvM4X_3/view?usp=sharing

Genre - Coming of age(?)/drama

Length - 19 pages

Logline- An 8th grade student makes a series of choices that affects the adults around him.

Warning:This story has very strong language

Feedback- Any an all is accepted. Really want to know if the characters and story are strong. This was something longer that I think is better cut down to the 3 parts.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1N7PrBKymoeIwsLk-36---ow4e6KdgwlK/view?usp=drivesdk

Logline: A mother and daughter, who are members of a QAnon-style cult, embark on a journey across the United States to prepare for what they believe is the apocalypse.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1O6uA5XOA9YlXYOHOKba9t4naj6v3_Sr_/view?usp=sharing

I posted this a while back and got some fairly positive responses. I haven't changed much, other than the title, which I hope sounds more intriguing. Also, the logline doesn't capture the full scope of the story, since it has an unconventional structure. You'll see what I mean if you read it.

"Shikra" follows the journey of Shikra, a humanoid deer, and his friend Lykos, a humanoid fox, as they navigate friendship, conflict, and personal growth. The story begins with the pair bantering at a dock before attending the festival.

https://tmet-my.sharepoint.com/:w:/g/personal/20schase_ivc_tmet_org_uk/ESCKL6HTEAxHvVvLhzLeXXoBlqaTKYtEgN2Y_eVaeAXnqw?e=E8ebK8

, but as the festival progresses, Shikra’s darker side emerges. A flashback reveals his childhood insecurities during a failed violin performance. The screenplay blends humor and emotional depth, highlighting Shikra's internal struggles as he faces challenges and risky situations

Title: No Goodbyes, Just Hello

Format: Feature

Logline: An Eastern European illegal immigrant Waclaw is a stand-up comedian. He also works as a handyman. At one day he works at the house of Edda Egan, the massive pop star.

Genre: Romantic Comedy

Reference: Larry David meets Richard Curtis

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1MjubizdiDAS0bRXTN62em4KsVUgSqPJy/view?usp=sharing

I'm pretty sure you’ve got better ways to spend your time, but if you’re really just sitting around and have nothing to do, maybe give my script a read. I'd like to get some feedback, any feedback and I can take it -- even if it's brutal. I’ll question my life choices for a minute, but I’ll survive.

Here’s what I need to know: Do Waclaw and Edda work? Does it come through that Waclaw’s got a crush on Edda, but also wouldn’t mind if she just helped him get legal status? If that's all she did, he’d be fine with it. And does their scene work as a meet-cute?

But overall, I'd like to hear whatever what's on your mind about it.

I am developing a 10-15 minute short film in the drama/romance genre with a thriller twist and am seeking a dedicated and experienced screenwriter, ideally someone who can also direct, to collaborate with me on this project. This is a serious endeavor, with plans to shoot in December and submit to multiple film festivals, with the goal of winning and providing great exposure for all involved. All this is in Los Angeles, I already have arrangement of Cinematographer, gears and crew.

If you are passionate about storytelling and interested in collaborating on a project designed for the festival circuit, please share your portfolio or writing samples. Serious inquiries only. Please DM me.

Format: TV pilot

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1Y3SafSZ6XqvSEB7GONiPMwCjAEiy5vbF/view?usp=drive_link

This is a project I worked on years ago and recently came back to, polished it up a bit and was pretty pleased with how it looked overall. Wonder how the general world building come across, what characters you particularly feel drawn to or put off by. Any notes would be helpful on what works and what jars or pulls you out of it.

Thank you.

Title: Original Conspiracies

Format: Feature

Logline: It's technically three stories about three characters named Unlucky, Lucky, and Debbie, and nobody knows what happened to them, hence these three stories.

Genre: Spy Thriller (kinda)

Pages: First 12 Pages

Here's the link below:

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1Iw234YO-rvPkrpf9CLmgAewBxqF9ybgQ/view?usp=sharing

My primary concern is to ensure I have the correct formatting/structure. I have read other scripts (primarily Fargo's), and I am using WriterDuet. I didn't edit my dialogue much, and I am not sure if I am allowed to have it written in the manner I do. Thank you for reading it and hope you enjoy it.

https://youtu.be/C-3M41KTz94?si=CcG4GEhbat_2Qtl3

This short film was shot by me on an iPhone 15 Pro Max. It started with a few random shots, but later I developed a story around them. Your feedback is appreciated!

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1-TAFDEuES9GkOrgqyrMapFRiot1JoUY6/view?usp=sharing

Only 3 pages

https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1Gd9xhGA5oSY5dNEydGayUW7nFOEoC--x?usp=drive_linkLogline:When a seemingly ordinary teen  named Jessie discovers he's the prophesied savior of a magical fairy tale realm, he teams up with  the kids of  famous storybook characters to thwart an evil sorceress's sinister plot.

I wrote the Pilot and Three Episode If you want to read them the Link the to them i there the order is Pilot Part one, Pilot ,What is Happening,Goodbyes and after that I'm stuck with my writing I'm writing episode four but I'm stuck

SYNOPSIS: A brave yet reckless young noblewoman—with dreams of becoming a knight like her father—discovers a plot to overtrhow a benevolent queen by accident. Aided by a magically gifted thief, she races across the wilderness to evade capture—all while a dormant hereditary power within gradually transforms her into a dragon.

PDF Link

In the tone/scope of LOTR and Game of Thrones. Managed to pare down a behemoth 250-page-ish draft down to a more manageable 164-page one. Looking for general feedback, but also any places that could potentially be cut to meet the targeted 2.5-hour runtime.