https://drive.google.com/file/d/1KLHszoA3qIQz7D71gJNsklJTMtFhc2HX/view?usp=drivesdk

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1arB3rU0L82bW7mlezweaAlb1jr6zwP8x9rbOABXrrM0/edit?usp=sharing

It's been a month since my last post, therefore it's time to dredge up and dust off a piece of college writing. Concerns/questions are spoilered below.

!I'm worried that the piece is a bit emotionally scattered. The crux is supposed to be the narrator's self-consciousness about how she isn't feeling grief over the death of someone she wasn't particularly close to. However, I feel like the bits of hometown loathing paint a much more negative picture, and given the lack of detail I give about Theresa's history with Clark I'm wondering if the audience will read something dark into it.!<

!Additionally, similar to my previous piece, I'm interested if the limited visual description bothers readers, though since this is first-person, short, contemporary, and a monologue, I'm not as worried.!<

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1lduVZP2s9ZvJQykTFgRaDEyB_mvCuOkOjElK5NkK_Pg/edit?usp=sharing

I've been in a bit of a creative slump lately so I figure the way to get out of it is to haul out something I wrote a few years ago, give it a once-over, and see what people have to say about it.

It's historical fiction/embellished nonfiction. My main concern is that it doesn't really have a point; too short to be plot-driven, devoid of vivid description, shallow on character development.

Hi all,

As a little exercise, i've written three scenes, one each for my Protagonist, Antagonist the the 'Theme Character' in which a specific, story-relevant moment of change occurs for them, one that will certainly come back to haunt them in the course of the story.

I'm looking for feedback on how effective the scenes are at communicating what the character's about, and what process of change or realisation they've undergone during the scene. In my mind I can boil it down to a few words, I'd be really interested if you can too.

I've also been trying a slightly different style for me, where I've tried to 'blend' the narrator's voice and the style of prose more closely with the character's thoughts and emotional state. I'd like to know how you feel about that style of narration, again, whether it's effective.

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Those things aside, I'd also welcome any other thoughts you have. It's a detective story in a fantasy setting, and there are world-building elements. It'd be cool to know if you like them, or if you're not keen and why.

Each scene is c. 2000 words long, and there are 3 of them, making 6000 total. The scenes are related, but each works as its own thing as well. If you'd like to read and critique one, two, or all three, you absolutely can.

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Thanks very much, look forward to hearing from you.

Last time I showed this to anyone I confused a lot of people with my setting. I'd like to know if I've solved that problem, and general thoughts on the story would also be great.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1WS6gZg7EMKqcZXYYjvtCRUP1uVCAyMo5dju7XR0xRzc/edit?usp=sharing

https://docs.google.com/document/d/14VGXkUpYKReQJ1hGptqSK88kN2R3B3tuC99oUhEf-qM/edit?usp=sharing

Google Link, currently around 1100 words, with assorted notes and cut bits at the bottom