So I thought about how the Gallagher brothers would cover this poem. Maybeeee like this:

https://open.spotify.com/album/7Mo4S6zMTEjiesji8lO0cB

i've been trying to finish this song for ages and the mix has given me absolute hell lol. i'm self-taught and usually mixing vox feels pretty intuitive but i'm having a hard time with this one. any suggestions are welcome. general critiques as well

https://on.soundcloud.com/1U1D1WBMvaXrUkSU8

Just wrote a ballad and was wondering if I could get any feedback on the lyrics.

Monday Mourning:

It’s 2am I’m wide awake God I just want free from this ache This doesn’t feel right Leaving things in the air But I thought I’d leave, I thought that you never cared And I’ll be alright I just need some time I need you to tell me that you’ll never be mine

Left you on a Sunday night Was missing you on Monday morning Told myself I’m done forever But look at me I’m still in mourning I tried my best, but it didn’t matter You’re still the only one I’d rather have with me

So now we don’t talk How’d we get here I just want you to be sincere And say how you feel I should leave it alone Thought I would feel better now but I just don’t And I’ll be alright I just need more time I guess I’ll just lie when they ask me if I’m fine

Left you on a Sunday night Was missing you that Monday morning Told myself I’m done forever But look at me I’m still in mourning I tried my best, but it didn’t matter Cuz you’re still the only one who matters I tried my best to break the pattern But I’m the only thing that’s shattered

I’m a musician and music student. Admittedly, I’m far more interested in the creative aspects that come with being a musician. The writing, the music making, the shows, the stories etc. I’m a very emotional person so I think I focus a lot on the impact that music can have over anything else. I have this idea for a prolonged narrative, that admittedly serves nobody but me, but I still want to be recognised within my local communities.

I’m interested in having a persona or something that separates me from my work, something that is both authentically me and not me at all. An over dramatised version of my negative qualities, but never crossing the line.

My work is my own, and I always write how I feel, I’d never change my life to fit a false narrative. But for some reason, this idea of having a character or a persona has always been in the back of my head, maybe it’s a neurodivergent thing. Channeling my emotions through something fabricated, does that eliminate the authenticity of my emotions?

An outline of how the narrative may look:

First EP: A young, outwardly queer man, early 20’s, lives with his queer artistic group of friends. He aspires to be an artist, but now spends his time feeding the addictions he developed in his teens, he reflects on the apocalyptical feeling of his teens and the man he loved and lost. Empty and completely reborn, he tries to escape his past through new ventures, work, sex, etc. He starts making art again, but he can’t stop feeding his addictions. He becomes the epitome of beauty, art, sex and lust and loses himself completely. After a situation, he is reminded of home and his former lover, he stops killing himself and regains parts of himself back, but that isn’t met without the question of ‘What now?’ He can’t return home, it’s too far gone and he resents it. He doesn’t have anything, or anyone to fight for. And he can’t bear the exhaustion of fighting for himself.

Album: A prequel to the First EP. The album follows the character from the first EP through his teens in his hometown. Examining how queer kids adapt to a life of hate, how public education systems are failing certain demographics of young people, how Gen - Z are being raised with all the knowledge at their fingertips and they are still losing, how kids are becoming junkies, etc. As well as opening about my experience being a creative kid raised in a country known for its recent violence, political injustice and that is constantly misjudged and misunderstood by the countries surrounding it. Young love, and the consequences of it. I will also be focusing on harder subjects like SA and violence.

Continuing from this will be up to however I feel at the time. I have a few ideas but I would rather keep them to myself.

I’m very inspired by the narrative of Ethel Cain’s Preachers Daughter as well as The 1975’s stage productions and performances.

I want to represent queer youth from where I’m from, in a kind of anarchist attitude while also recognising where self worth comes from and remaining very real with my writing. I want us young people to kind of recognise that culture hasn’t died, it lives within the stories we haven’t had the chance to tell.

Please let me know what you think of this, any other elements that could help contribute to creating a persona, or if it’s too far fetched and I should stop focusing on myself so much.

Very new to this and these few lyrics are the first thing I’ve written I’m not sure if it’s any good and I’d love some feedback of any sorts thank you

A moth on the window, Their Soft wings like gauze A flicker of longing No map for the cause

In circles were spinning, Lost in the hum of the lights The whispers of summer Keep fading over time

and im waiting for something or maybe it’s someone Your soft hand to hold steady The twine of my heart comes undone

What up world! I made this emotional thing and I'd like to share it with you

https://soundcloud.com/bestkostas-17/5480ac11-bd68-4f79-a84d-20a62cb2f64f?si=426b931522654ba2a92057824dee21bc&utm_source=clipboard&utm_medium=text&utm_campaign=social_sharing

Title*- Karam Da Lath The Weight of Fate

Karam da lath,
Labhna pyaar ch,
Chhad de ni kamm,
We gon’ vibe tonight…

Gallan teri nachdi kudi, dil nu karein compile,
Vulnerable heart, like a kite in the sky,
Bas teri yaadan, chhad kiti ae bye,
Tere bina, ae duniya hai black and white,
Jiven chaand de bina, sadi raatan da plight,
Feel the heat, love’s a double-edged sword,
Par tu hi meri khuda, tu hi meri world,

Tention di gaddi, sarhadi hai saadi,
Gallan badiyan par khwaban nai khushiyaan sadhi,
Swag da chakkar, tu te main rap,
Dil da bhara shoq, chhadiye na gap,
Tainu yaad rahe, oh dil de kareeb, (x2)
Karam da lath, sajna, tu hi meri zindagi,
Feel the fire burn, baby, don’t you believe,
Saddi pyar di kahani, badi bold, badi deep,

Chad ke kamm, bas tu mere naal,
Par chad gaye dost, kar gaye baadal,
Honsle na thande, par khud nu samjha,
Sadda pyaar jiven do ik riha,
Tere sang ballin’, saade din chaakan,
Bitches jado jave, mere layi aayi,
I’m flexin’ hard, but missing your smile,
Pain da report, par love di file,

Akhiri saans di tarah, saath tujh bina,
Tere bina, ni koi jadoo ni hunda,
Karam da lath, chhad de na kadah,
Duniya de shetra ch, saade pyaar da shor,

Tainu yaad rahe, oh dil de kareeb, (x2)
Karam da lath, sajna, tu hi meri zindagi,
Feel the fire burn, baby, don’t you believe,
Saddi pyar di kahani, badi bold, badi deep,

Karam da lath, pyaar de rang,
Jivein sadi kahani, khud chadan da sang,
Saddi yaadon di gaddi, tujhse chalu,
Ni tu hai sab kuch, jiven khuda da jadoo…

Karam, karan, wafa, munda…
Saddi kahani…
Karam da lath.

video

https://reddit.com/link/1he91hi/video/24bamuc22v6e1/player

I need a rapper that can sing. Even if it isn't very good - mediocre singing will do but you need to be able to hold a note. If you are interested, please DM me or email me with some of your work at adyschannel79@gmail.com

Was reading through an interview with an Musician on the topic of SongWriting and thought someone could benefit from this word. Although this can very from helpful to useless depending on YOUR perspective.

(This "Technique" was used by the band in a time where "Recording Devices" (Tape Recorders) weren't accessible to them (for whatever reasons). This was all out of necessity due to their circumstances)

"We would write a song and just have to remember it. And there was always the risk that we'd just forget it. If the next morning you couldn't remember it; it was gone. There must have been dozens lost this way."

The inconvenience that would cause fucking NIGHTMARES to Aspiring Songwriters may have benefited their music in some way. Maybe had even been a positive influence?

It obviously has to influence the entire songwriting process, I feel that you being forced to recall the strong parts of a melody (for example) and forget the less memorable parts of it (maybe even go back and tweak it till it’s just right) would naturally and organically craft a pretty strong song melodically. Everything Would Fall Into Its Right Place

You may not agree and this all may sound flawed but, just think about it.. Recording Devices can really change / influence the Songwriting Process

"You had to write songs that were MEMORABLE, because you had to remember them or they were lost. You would have to form the thing, have it all finished, remember it all, go in pretty quicky and record it."

There is a CON to this though, like a song you wrote could be lost forever. It's sorta like a filter and it works like one. It's just more risky, so be cautious if you experiment with this..

If would be specifically helpful if people who have tried this themselves told me the results, things like how it influenced your song, what came out of the session, ect,ect.

For me, recently I was inspired to write a particular song after watching videos of different streamers reacting to a specific scene from a game I play.

I have this song stuck in my head and I can’t figure out what it’s from. I think I figured out the notes (as long as I’m in the right key)

C C G# F#, C C G#, C C C# C A#

Please someone help lol