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[First Verse] Levi was a terrified kid. He felt miserable at school. High school was an everyday hell. His classmates gave him so much hell. He couldn’t take the pain any longer.

[Second Verse] Levi was having a hard time. He tried to navigate his difficult life. He was struggling to find peace of mind. His mind and meditation out of focus. The idea of disappearing widened his eyes.

[Third Verse] Levi was alone at home. Crying and pacing around the living room. He whispered “I love you” to the family photos. He took one last look at himself in front of the mirror. Before pulling a disappearing act.

Hi everyone,

I wanted to share something deeply personal with you all. A few years ago, I went through a tough and painful breakup. The person I loved the most cheated on me, and it shattered my world. I felt lost, devastated, and completely broken. But it was in that darkness that I found something powerful, my pen and paper. I poured all my emotions into a song that eventually became Shattered Illusions.

This song is more than just a breakup anthem; it’s my story of betrayal, but also of rising above the hurt and finding strength in the aftermath. It’s a reminder that even in the most painful moments, we can heal and rebuild.

If you’ve ever felt betrayed, lost, or broken, I hope this song resonates with you. It’s my raw, honest expression of everything I went through, and I truly believe music can heal. 🎧

Here’s the link to listen: https://youtu.be/3bGsrKPRBv8

I’d love to hear your thoughts, and if you connect with the song, feel free to share your own stories. Let’s support each other through the music and the journey.

Lyrics:

She walked in beauty like night skies
Sparkling eyes concealed the lies
Whispered dreams that felt so true
Broke my heart with what she knew

Fights like storms without an end
Love twisted in her cruel blend
Words like daggers
Sharp and cold
Left me shattered
Feeling old

Fell in love with a mirage
Couldn't see the sabotage
Now I'm broken
Can't pretend
This pain just seems to never end

Filed her claims and wore her mask
Covered up her wicked tasks
I'm left empty
Pockets drained
Standing lost in this dark rain

Fell in love with a mirage
Couldn't see the sabotage
Now I'm broken
Can't pretend
This pain just seems to never end

I believed in every kiss
But there's poison in her bliss
Caught in storm and I can't see
When will heartache set me free

Melodic metal P is clean vocals H is harsh and T is together.

Verse 1- P: I feel your shadow reach for mine I watch as wildflowers die I hear your whispers in the dark A kingdom cold you left your mark H: The ones above will never know The seclusion of the pit below Yet in cold, you made me whole My queen of death bound soul to soul

Pre chorus- P: I feel the pull of life and death H: Transfixed with her I hold my breath

Chorus- T :I'm torn between wrong and right But in your arms I lose the fight Between the dawn and deaths embrace In the dark I am / You are my queen

Verse 2- H: You ate the fruit, you sealed your fate,
Now you're bound to me, with no escape.
I gave you six seeds of crimson red,
Mark the line between living and dead. P: I feel the weight of endless night,
But in my heart, I crave springs light.
Those pomegranate seeds have made me torn,
Between the dark and the sun reborn.

Pre chrous P: I feel the pull of life and death H: Transfixed with her I hold my breath

BREAKDOWN H :In darkness, you belong to me, P: I will never belong to you H: In shadows deep, eternally. P: I am a ruler here

Chorus T: I'm torn between wrong and right But in your arms I lose the fight Between the dawn and deaths embrace In the dark I am / You are my queen

It’s come to the point; I’ve seen through your eyes. Now here comes the part; where it all goes to lies.

Weakness has set in, and we’re still untitled. All I know is a sin; this confession vital.

So I let go; and wash my hands of this pain. Yes, I let go; and wash my mind of your name. Cause I know; love will open a door again.

Our love is this open door; that we never can close. And the memories resist up in me; now I’m loosing control.

Weakness has set in, and we’re still untitled. All I know is a sin; this confession vital.

So I let go; and wash my hands of this pain. Yes, I let go; and wash my mind of your name. Cause I know; love will open a door again.

One more fight, one more glare. One more push, and I swear. We both know that I’m not scared. And now we’re broken, broken; my heart is open.

Weakness has set in, and we’re still untitled. All I know is a sin; this confession vital.

So I let go; and wash my hands of this pain. Yes, I let go; and wash my mind of your name. Cause I know; love will open a door again.

Oh, you should unmake me.
I want you to break me down to my core.
Oh, don't try to change me,
nothing can save me not anymore.

None of this feels real.
No more nerves of steel now. I am breaking down and don't know how to feel.
Always feeling empty.
Feel my heart is bending.
I don't know how much more that I can take.

Staying inside my mind.
It isn't gonna be okay.
Whatever happens next,
I'm never gonna be the same.

Oh, you should unmake me.
I want you to break me down to my core.
Oh, don't try to change me,
nothing can save me not anymore.

Want it to be over.
No, please, don't come over.
You don't wanna see this fall from grace.
Darkness drawing near now.
I can't fight this time now.
All I have is fear worn on my face.

I don't really wanna lie,
it was never gonna be ok.
This is our last goodbye –

Oh, you should unmake me.
I want you to break me down to my core.
Oh, don't try to change me,
nothing can save me not anymore.

Oh, you should unmake me.
I want you do break me down to my core.
Oh, don't try to change me,
nothing can save me not anymore.

Nothing can save me not anymore.

I've been down this road before.
I don't like where this one goes.
But this nightmare needs to end, so
I need to back track.
Nobody to save me, so I need to back track.

Splintered paths, now intertwined.
A well-trodden marching line.
I don't know what lies ahead,
but I need to make ammends.
Is this how my story ends?
This is how my story ends.

You just keep your eyes on course.
Marching into the unknown.
There's no way to turn back now, so
(You need to back track) I need to track back.
(Nobody to save you, so you need to back track) Nobody to save me, so I need back track.

intro:

get, get, get some 

Verse:

At night come home to you on time 

torture you if you fuck up 

Fuck up this good life 

Built up brick by brick in shapes of hearts

Mine specifically  

Thought the moulding was right 

Only good I did was make things hard 

Pre Chorus:

Let me send back all your things 

Ill send it back to your house 

Back to the home where your kids roam free

Ain't my children not worth tripping 

Shoulda fucked you just for riches 

Needed you while you need Jesus 

Chorus:

Do you know that you gave up everything,

fucking round on the girl you love

fucking round on the girl you love

Do you know that you gave up everything,

fucking round on the girl you love

fucking round on the girl you love

Verse:

I know your triggered

Sell your story in pictures  

Revealing your short comings since you tough  

You cant live without me

You cant get what all I bring to you

You cant bluff around me 

You cant fuck around on me 

Bridge:

Im In tune to all the who’s you’ve be doing 

behind me is your future 

Chorus:

Do you know that you gave up everything,

fucking round on the girl you love

fucking round on the girl you love

Do you know that you gave up everything,

fucking round on the girl you love

fucking round on the girl you love

I love you so much

I know if you were here you'd say I was doing too much

Lord knows I can't help how I feel about you

It's been five years past still I care so much about you

If they cut me I would bleed out appreciation for you sweetie

The same day you departed I already rejoiced in you're great legacy

You mean the world to me

God sent someone who looked exactly like you to me

She was smiling so freaking hard

Till eternity that day will always touch my heart

Weeks prior I seen a heavenly light

What you meant to those who knew you will forever shine bright

New York was lucky enough to have you

San Francisco misses you

You're father raised such a good woman

How you impacted my world I'm steady thinking

When I was down and out same year

You're true essence was so contagious each year so much I started to cheer

Especially those Friday tributes

Just to show this world how much I'll always love you

I remember the first time I raised that beer to the car ceiling

It was such a special feeling

Beyond what anyone will ever know

I'm so sorry that hope for you was so ice cold

It kept delaying

Each time you're heart kept breaking

Wishing I could kiss those broken pieces and glue them back

Sadly the hands of time can't turn back

Gotta move forward

When hope came to me felt like with you it was shared

Thanking the skies my heart felt so special

Like that photoshoot when you was on that couch you are so special

I remember setting my mind on finding you in my dreams

Months later it actually happened that three minute talk was serene

I exhaled in pure happiness

I hope you're last days were pure happiness

It's so hard you not being here

Wherever you are I just wanna be there

Knowing I have a shrine in my heart of you

To and infinity and beyond Tara Condell I love you

Hello, Reddit community!

Over the past two years, I’ve been studying how to write song lyrics. My journey began with poetry, and I’ve recently started transforming those poems into songs. I’m excited (and a little nervous) to share my debut lyrical video, "One Night One Dance."

Here’s the link: https://youtu.be/jSUyb1t-dO4

I’d truly appreciate your honest feedback on the lyrics. Are there any improvements you’d suggest, or parts you particularly liked? Your comments mean a lot to me as I continue to grow as a lyricist.

Thank you for taking the time to listen!

Lyrics:

Chorus (Hook):

On a dark, cold night, when the world felt still,

Her eyes lit the room, and time stood still.

One look, one dance, was all it took—

Call me crazy, but I swear it’s written in the book.

Verse 1:

Went out with the boys, just the usual scene,

Neon lights and music, chasing a dream.

But then she walked in, and I froze in place,

With every move, she rewrote the space.

I made my way over, heart racing fast,

Said something dumb, but she still laughed.

“Are you from the movies, or just passing through?”

She said, “I’m here for fun. What about you?”

Pre-Chorus:

We danced through the noise, as the world spun ‘round,

Her voice cut the chaos, the sweetest sound.

In her smile, I felt a warmth I’d never known,

But she left me guessing, out here alone.

(Chorus)

Verse 2:

She led, I followed—our rhythm was wild,

Every glance she gave was pure, unbridled.

She asked for salsa, but trance filled the air,

I fumbled my moves, but she didn’t care.

We made up stories—her from Berlin,

Me from the south, with a guitar to spin.

It was silly, it was fleeting, but it felt so real,

Like the universe had turned its wheel.

Bridge:

And then she said, “Midnight’s calling my name,

No need for numbers; let’s keep it the same.”

But I’ll never forget her eyes in the light—

A love that began on that cold, dark night.

(Chorus)

Outro:

If fate aligns, we’ll meet once more,

Until that day, she’s what I’m searching for.

With tequila and lime, I’ll toast to the chance,

Of finding my muse for another dance.

Here is The gentleman you craved The man you came to see In all wisdom In all pockets He is surely pretty deep

He'll stand 'Fore generals and kings Presidents and queens In palaces he'll dwell And he surely is no pest

He has estates that he doesn't put to waste Shelters his own in troubled times A place for every season Out of reach of evil

He is The gentleman I'll be The gentleman you'll see In all cultures In all art forms But for now that's just a dream

A jack of all he'll stand 'Fore generals and kings Presidents and queens He has more than enough for bribes

He'll be Your protector and your lead Cause truly worthy kings Still want to please their Lord In all things

But I'm not him I'm broken and I'm beat Not even 33 I want the finest things That could help not waste time

That's me The man I wanna be The man I wanna be The gentleman I made

The reflection of the sun

as it dances on the sea

gives no light, gives no warmth, is not real

I could never be the one

that you wanted me to be

an inhuman, unliving ideal

you choose to be blind

locked up in your mind

spurning all that exists

loving only a lie

no human hands trace

the curves of your face

will you ever be kissed

by these shadows and mists

by the scales on your eyes?

and a statue of gold

ever flawless and fair

that outshines any daughter of Eve

never once will it hold

you and soothe your despair

when you suffer no statue will grieve

you choose to be blind

locked up in your mind

spurning all that exists

loving only a lie

no human hands trace

the curves of your face

will you ever be kissed

by these shadows and mists

by the scales on your eyes?

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PzXSQeth3Uo

A song that felt very special but after a breakup, suffered a long hiatus. It’s now finished. My first musical number made for the stage. Here is a link to the digital demo for those that wish to hear. Let me know what you guys think, I hope you enjoy it.

It Happens Suddenly

[Key: C major]
[Time: 4/4]
[Tempo: 160 BPM]\

[Intro Piano Figure]

[Verse 1]
I remember the day you first came,
And stepped into frame.
And when I asked your name,
I knew I’d never be the same

Just a flash of your smile,
And my world was no longer blue.
Your beauty pure and true.
Lost in the thought of you…

[Pre-Chorus 1]
Then suddenly,
You’re lying next to me,
But it was only in my mind.
As life unfolds,
Some fear what love may hold
Still, you never know what you may find

[Chorus 1]
Suddenly,
You rest your hand in mine,
And take my breath with eyes that shine
So heavenly.
Just like that,
It happens suddenly

[Interlude Piano Figure]

[Verse 2]
Moments span through the ripples of time,
In each one I find,
You’re always on my mind.
When we’re together we shine.

Journeys made in such style,
Eager for the next one ahead,
“Even movies in bed”
Yet still, there’s more to be said…

[Pre-Chorus 2]
When suddenly,
You whisper you love me,
But it was just a trick of the wind.
I want you to know,
I’m not afraid to show.
So, come with me and let’s transcend.

[Chorus 2]
Suddenly,
While hand in hand we dance
I pull you close, our hearts entranced
So honestly.
“I love you.”
You smile and say it too when suddenly…

[Bridge]
All at once, I’m filled with doubt,
Do I deserve such happiness?
My heart melts with ev’ry kiss,
I’ve never felt a love like this.
As my mind spins in circles, I lose my grip on truth
In all this craziness.

Is this real,
or will I find that it was only limerence?
Yet I know you feel it too,
so really what’s the difference?
I’ve lost all sense…

[Chorus 3]
When suddenly, oh,
As if out of a dream,
Now with a mother’s smile that beams
So perfectly.
No more doubt, I see our destiny,
My dear, please marry me!

[Chorus 4]
[Modulation to D major]
No matter where we roam,
In you, I’ve found my light, my home, my one and only.
I swear that,
This love won’t stray,
We’ll face each day,
So come what may,
Time ticks away,
As hair turns gray,
While grandkids play,
We’ll laugh and say,
“Life happens suddenly.”

we are like bonnie and Clyde far from each other, yet there is the interlude now we are in each other world she told me she won't, but she did, and in the end, i lose Sometimes, it feels like im no use yet again, we are like bonnie and clyde though i never tried wine or got high i feel like im on cloud nine it doesn't matter day or night i will never die and leave you behind it feels like last night bond born that will never end till time bends, and my mind becomes spent and my hair is grey with no black or red That's a promise i took upon myself for me, the party with you never ends hollow knight coping with you like fat slight i'm like a riddle i'm dark inside "Join the darkness" within my light but then i changed and went through the right now im clinging like a koala with hopes of reaching new heights "Do you think it's alright?" Yeah, im obsessed. It's alright then again im..... sitting by my window all night waiting for that blinding light i hope my death is easy on your mind i hope my death brings you light but then again, "legends never die" i'm on stand-by Fill my life now again i'm on a diet i'm like Arsene lupin, gently rob your mind is that alright? if i rob your mind fill my life leave love levels in spikes? in my mind im alone with my scythe waiting to kill and win my fight it's for us, i might trip that white, trick the vile, and win my life i'm a villain, but i want no villain life maybe like Mike townly but with no cheating wife need a loving wife be my wife i just want a peaceful life is that alright ? then i return again, and i'm..... sitting by my window all night waiting for that blinding light i hope my death is easy on your mind i hope my death brings you light but then again, "legends never die" i'm on stand-by Fill my life such a delight

Context: This was the first song I ever wrote, finished it back in November of 2023. I was moved to write it after hearing about the tragic mass shooting that happened in October of that year. I was reading a lyric writing book at the time and it talked about how the Beatles and other bands in the past would read the newspaper or other forms of media and write songs on that. So I went and read every single gofund me page of the victims. Not sure if I needed that, but I felt the pain.

I've been baffled at the media and others thinking that restricting gun access is the only thing that will prevent these tragic events. The issue is mental illness and people not getting the help they need.

Enjoy and let me know what you think! I also have a video of me singing it at an open mic night if y'all like

Can't You See

Can't you see the signs, they're written on the wall
For Zoey and for all, they echoed through the hall
We tried to make a change, but always hit a wall
When will we stand tall, when will we stand tall

Lost souls in the night, slipping through the cracks Why can't we hold them tight, before they turn their backs

Can't you see, can't you see How our silence writes their destiny Can't you hear, can't you hear The unheard cries, drenched in fear Can't you see, can't you see It's up to us to set them free

Every candle lit, a prayer in the dark Just a tiny spark, but where do we start? Tales of troubled minds, warnings left unheard One act so absurd, yet we find no words

Can’t you see the pain we're in? Can't you feel it in the wind? The cries for help, the silent screams, we're falling apart at the seams.

Can't you see, can't you see How our silence writes their destiny Can't you hear, can't you hear The unheard cries, drenched in fear Can't you see, can't you see It's up to us to set them free

Choke

Choke on the truth you cant swallow

Drown

Drown in the pit of your sorrow

No one can save you (only yourself,)

Look in the mirror you did this to yourself

Cant think of anything else to put in the parentheses, or even what to replace the whole line with

Did you see... The flutter?
The rise? The fall?

Do nothing, say nothing Who manipulates who? You me? Or me you?

Did you see Those diamond eyes, that cheshire grin That peirced, and gnashed and tore at him

Do nothing, say nothing Who manipulates who? You me? Or me you?

Did you see him gasp for air? He looked in those eyes and tossled her hair She did nothing, said nothing And left him with dread

Do nothing, say nothing Who manipulates who? You me? Or me you?

Was it destined to end before it began?

The knights of the flames, We march in fierce pace, We will clash sword and mace, And spread our glory through decades!

Warriors of dawn! We will fight for the sun! Like the light of our moon, We will make our foes burn!

We fight for the Swords! For our maidens and the gods! We won't lose our temp, We determined till the end!

Warriors of dawn! We will fight for the sun! Like the light of our moon, We will make our foes burn!

For the Queen and the King, For our glory we will lit! We will cross our flames, To create rainbow of death!

Warriors of dawn! We will fight for the sun! Like the light of our moon, We will make our foes burn!

Army of Morvin, the candles of Veridia! We will raise our swords, Generos Gloria! And with our flaming rage, We will last to the last page!

As I continue to tiptoe down serrated edges, self created

I begin to contemplate if the plummet is underrated

All this lazin has paved a way into apothetic sedation.

And now, in a ragin haze; I sway toward amazing grace. .......

I'm turning diabetic from drinking these diuretics

Plus I got a mild headache.

Need a naked nurse and a medic. ......

I'm so prophetic when I'm spittin a bar.

Or transmitting a subtle shift as I'm splittin a gar.

Limping, I walk alone, cause I cannot be helped

Leaving only anger and angst in the homes that I've dwelt.

My ego won't let me go..... it's aggressive, possessive.

Excessively stressin, .....now I'm expressin confessions.

I'm pressing, I'm pushing the issue and I cannot stop.

Im Aesop, and I'm all ears at the coffee shop.

How come everybody stuck in their heads? im fed up with this and im fed up with meds, i cant express; how this can impact my art; but im smart like the people said, guess im just a misfit, just a kid; that never really fit in, im in it, and fuck this buisiness; nobody is actually listenin', Now im grabbing some raw beef--im fixin' something up in this kitchen, and you can bet for starters that i'll be chopping some--slick bars, and confess yall got weak hearts, gutting the stubborn, the single minded--i must confide in who i am, im deep in the ocean, a trojan, your still searchin--for salmon, but your hiding in kelp, And humanity proves that yall need help, so come and sit in, inside this paradox; where my insight's dock for free, fuck the box and my options lay low so just laugh at my visions.

Yeah, Grenade in my head and i just pulled the pin, reaching for my heart just like the shrapnel and lead did, Im up ahead, I’m coming for your lane got my head, first i'l burst in just like a freight train, Im Bruce Wayne, moving through shadows, the shadows of the moon and passionately observe,the edge, like a titanium blade; exposed to the nerve, when will, i break? Im burning up my fuel; like the coal to a flame, beat Got loose shame, cut throats, and choke clones—be careful when im gone; cause im in the game, im dishing up til i feel full, im grabbing myself the superbowl

I’m ready to blow the fabric of reality; the industry’s a black hole, so they can’t land a hand on me. Caught rapping the borderlines of gravity, physically outcasted by the minds of humanity; Man I can’t stand, the bland; ignorant people who easily shut out my plans, my standards, and my sanity. The only thing thats keeping me cool is the A.C Remember Egypt in A.D? Those were the times when nobody was lazy, Either working as slaves or praying for forgiveness for our sins, Or strategizing like Monopoly when there was no plan to win. And there are patterns in everyday life, like two people connecting, It’s key to paving a path, and it’s something that I’m possessing. Finding the time to shape it like the Earth and the sands, I’m bettering myself mentally; I have no need for these hands.

Cause you’re greedy, so your judgment is clouded like a plague, Leave me out. I understand that my insight can be vague, without a doubt, But I want to spread it like the cells in a brain, Connecting all the dots like the blood that’s flowing through my veins. There’s nothing wrong with being stupid, only wrong in staying it, That’s why there’s a little something called “breaking our chains.” And making it; I mean, it’s better than being locked up or oblivious to change. But theres only so much that a grounded person can reign, But there are signs that people feel exposed from these rhymes, You better embrace it, like high standards—something bystanders can’t climb. And it’s fire how I light up like a lantern. This is due, and uh oh— Atmospheric gases from the Earth that we pollute,

It’s a thrill when we shoot, we’re chemically juiced. Tainted red from the dirty blood that we bled in our roots, The Earth needs to shed the surface layer. I’m so sorry, Earth, that this is where we got led and that everybody is aloof.

She peed on my foot the night I met her

by the wooded trail with a goats head mask

it was the mushrooms or the moonlight

she seemed to know but I was afraid to ask

.

I was a teenager wearing butterfly wings

sleeping out of the back of a wrecked mercedes

feral without direction, all cringe and passion,

She fed me honey and moonstone rings

.

I am gonna be her when I grow up, you’ll see. I am gonna be her when I grow up

.

They taught me the summoning ritual of the cigarette

bottles in the floorboards and jars in the cabinet

the fire went out on Samhain when I prayed for home

we dried apples into old women so I’d never be alone

.

And they never were a mother kinda figure

Trading swigs from a bottle home brew mead

bitter and sweet, as the sunflowers wither

I’ll never have another dark moon winter without heat

.

I am gonna be her when I grow up You’ll see I am gonna be her when I grow up

.

I drove home from the play in a tear filled haze

To wait at her side for the coroner

the wind chimes over her bed don’t sway

Not ready for the future that waits

.

Who will be my elders when I’m all that’s left

who will feed the ferals seeking direction

If it’s going to be me I never got a lesson

If it’s going to be me I need a Ouija board to check in

.

and when the will was read she’d left one

Hi folks, I have a very short vocoder song I'm writing as an intro for my album. It's quite simple and I have all the lyrics nailed down except for one line. I've got a list of ideas, but none of them seem right.
I'm trying to convey the feeling of enormity/expansiveness when looking at the stars and pondering your place in all of it.
Anyone have ideas for the missing line? Preferably 4-7 syllables, no preference for whether it rhymes.

When I look up at the night sky
????????
But where am I?

I am out with lanterns searching for myself
I'm a thousand different versions of myself
I am here
I am
I am

Thanks for your help!

Mind and body, heart and soul

I was under your control

I paid tribute to a counterfeit of you

all I gave to you, you stole

and so skilful was your theft

ever subtle, ever deft

that it never dawned that anything was gone

till I had no treasure left

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ay4kRD0J_dc

(verse 1) if you see me coming down the street then id say oh im so glad to meet you its a nice day haven’t you had a trial (thats what you’d say) yeah but the court lost all their files (so i ran away) but i dont mean any harm to you so i wouldnt sound out the alarm if i were you what’s the matter bud do i got you feeling blue i dont want you to run away too its true what do i do everyone thinks im crazy but please im telling you im just kind of lazy just because i forget to pay my bills on time means that i should be locked away for a crime? i promise im fine no life on the line max of 7 years (probably just a fine) only if they can find me so come on and try me and dont just run by me ‘cause if you do then im finally

(chorus) caught in a troublesome spot and i dont got a lot this rubble is all piling on me im not going without a shot grab a phone call the cops yet ill run for my life and i wont stop in a troublesome spot my bubble gets popped and im thrown in the cell and then it gets locked like the locks on my door cinder blocks on the floor i aint goin’ on tour anymore till i settle this score

(verse 2) or at least, until the score settles me one way or another ill find myself free dont care if i have to sell my own pee to the rats in my cell in block 5-C “oh gee” they’ll say “glad they locked him away” while i fight to escape and i waste every day and then ill waste away there’ll be no heavy rain on that day they can say that a monster was slain yet ill sit here in silence ill sit here in pain ‘cause if anyone wants to try it they’ll pay unlike me on that day in the month before may my taxes unpaid yet ill still find a way to avoid finding myself someone once again

(chorus) caught in a troublesome spot and i dont got a lot this rubble is all piling on me im not going without a shot grab a phone call the cops yet ill run for my life and i wont stop in a troublesome spot my bubble gets popped and im thrown in the cell and then it gets locked like the locks on my door cinder blocks on the floor i aint goin’ on tour anymore till i settle this score

Beautiful vulture circling from above Waiting for you to consume me But you won’t until I give up I see in your eyes that you’re loving But you’ll only feed on a corpse You’re lonely and scouting and starving And waiting is making it worse

So ill wait for you to pick at me While im rotting in this field Picking the skin off my feet When I wished you would sweep me away

I wrote this fairly quickly as soon as I got home. It’s just an idea so far and I am fairly inexperienced with songwriting (I’ll write maybe a verse or a chorus when I’m feeling creative), but I want to continue with it. The vulture analogy fully encapsulates how I feel about the situation.

Me and my local henchmen, Toke more smoke than a locomotive engine.

He tried to mimic, he c'aint hit it thooo Cause I'm or-ig-i-nooool

Hi. I have one one Song I would like you guys to look at.... thanks.

Song Title: "Shared Walls"

Verse 1 The walls close in, no way to run, We’ve lost the fight before it’s begun. The air is thin, the silence loud, We’re tethered here beneath the cloud.

Pre-Chorus The cracks in the floor, the weight of the chains, We share the fear, we share the pain.

Chorus We are here, bound together, Locked in place through stormy weather. A prison of time, a fragile tether, But still, we hold—we hold together.

Verse 2 The days grow long, the nights stand still, We push and pull against the will. The echoes linger, the memories stay, We’re trapped in the night, searching for day.

Pre-Chorus The walls may break, the ground may shake, But what’s between us won’t ever fade.

Chorus We are here, bound together, Locked in place through stormy weather. A prison of time, a fragile tether, But still, we hold—we hold together.

Bridge What if the cage is where we’re meant to be? What if the struggle is the way to see? Though we can’t escape, we’ll find our way, Through every shadow, through every fray.

Chorus We are here, bound together, Locked in place through stormy weather. A prison of time, a fragile tether, But still, we hold—we hold together.

Outro So here we stay, no place to flee, Bound together, you and me. Through every storm, through every fight, We’ll find our way to the edge of the light.

Please tell me what you think, thanks.....

Song Title: "Guiding Light Within"

Verse 1 When the winds whisper doubts through the cracks in your mind, And the stars lose their shimmer, too far to find, There’s a glow in the quiet, a warmth breaking through, A light softly calling, it’s waiting for you.

Pre-Chorus Through shadows and silence, it steadies your pace, A pull from the darkness, a hand full of grace.

Chorus The light that leads, it’s always near, A flame that burns through every fear. Though unseen, it knows your name, A quiet force that steadies the flame.

Verse 2 When the rain finds your shoulders and the cold cuts too deep, And you’re searching for solace in a restless sleep, Feel the rise of the dawn as it kisses the dew, A light softly shining, it’s waiting for you.

Pre-Chorus Through the haze of the moment, it carries you on, A melody rising, a long-forgotten song.

Chorus The light that leads, it’s always near, A flame that burns through every fear. Though unseen, it knows your name, A quiet force that steadies the flame.

Bridge It’s the calm in the chaos, the lift in the fall, The whisper that answers when you’ve lost it all. It’s the thread through the ages, the promise of dawn, The light that keeps burning when the night feels too long.

Chorus The light that leads, it’s always near, A flame that burns through every fear. Though unseen, it knows your name, A quiet force that steadies the flame.

Outro When the road bends onward and the night’s not through, There’s a light softly waiting, it’s shining for you. The quiet force, the hand that leads, The promise of hope in the light that we need.

Greetings, everyone!

I know where I want to head with the full set of lyrics. I've titled the song "One Yes Away".

I've got a rough idea of a couple of verses and a possible bridge. I'm working on a better way to word the first two lines of this first verse, because they seem a little weak to me, and a bit cliche for some reason. But here's the first verse:

I saw her there, and she was lookin' so fine
Knew I had to try to make her mine
Got up the courage to ask her one day,
and hoped our first date was one yes away.

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See what I mean? The first lines seem weak and a bit cliche for some reason. Thoughts?

They Not Like Us WW1 edition Psst, I see dead people Mustard gas in the air, bro

From a French soldier’s standpoint

Aye Mustard gas in the air, bro Yo i think the sniper can see us though Man down Call an ambulance, tell him, "Breathe, bro" Nail a general to a battle his Wikipedia page long as me bro What's up with these Italian soldiers tryna see the entente? “The soldiers can hate me, I’m tryna win a war yo” How many nades you really got? I mean, it's too many options I'm finna throw a MK 1, we chargin that ain’t an option

From the nation France’s standpoint

Beat a German and hide the bayonet in case god is watchin’ Sometimes you gotta pop out and show soldas We Certified dead men, I'm the one they shoot at im dead by mornin Run him down, whole time I know he got bullets in him Gun on him, running like a lil baby he know i kill him Say POW, I hear you like ’em livin You better not ever go to cell block one To any soldiers that talk to him and they r’treating Just make sure you hide your food from ‘em They tell me other soldiers get your old you-ni-forms Then go to boot camp and see those holes And Scheer got a weird case, why is he around? Certified kraut boy certified warrior style Wop, wop, wop, wop, wop, Buat rough ’em up Wop, wop, wop, wop, wop, I'ma toughen em up Why he entrenched' like a child ain’t you tired? Tryna shoot a gun and it's probably A-Lugerrrrrrrrrrrrrr

Chorus

They not like us They not like us They not like us They not like us They not like us They not like